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    Wink Ma-he-can

    Silent as day falling into night
    he glides across fresh fallen snow
    barely leaving a trail in the land
    like a shadow in the night
    he blends in the night landscape

    a movement on the ground catches his attention
    he stops,body quivering with excitement
    a rabbit frozen with fear suddenly bolts
    ma-he-can jumps to the chase

    zig-zagging across the frozen ground
    the two hurtle through the silent woods
    ma-he-can never misses the rabbit's turns
    he could lunge and snap the rabbit's neck
    but he waits

    rabbit stumbles burying his face in the snow
    quivering eyes full of fear he awaits his death
    ma-he-can's eyes yellow expressionless stops
    he howls at the moon,a mournful cry
    his cry is answered in the wind

    he trots away,glancing back only once
    he is not hungry tonight
    the run was only for the joy of life.

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    Re: Ma-he-can

    i get the poem but i don't understand the title, is it some kind of word or something?

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    Re: Ma-he-can

    Punctuation would help the flow. Nice wording though.
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    Re: Ma-he-can

    Nice poem and the flow is awesome as well! Keep up the great work and to me ma-he-can is a wolf, but I could be wrong! Nice job!

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    Re: Ma-he-can

    hey blue your right Ma-he-can does mean wolf^_^how did you knowO.o

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    Re: Ma-he-can

    he is a fox , its an animal thing lol anyway i loved the poem
    and i love how you described how the wolf just killed for
    the pleasure of it ,its sort of like a human does some of
    us kill just because we can and we enjoy it.

    we might not howl but we have our ways of letting
    people know that we did something out of fun and enjoyment
    and i think how you did the poem gives it away as well about it
    being about a wolf.

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    Re: Ma-he-can

    It's like my big Bro HolderoftheDarkChalice said I am a fox! But the image that poem puts into my head gave me a clue, but when you said "he howls at the moon,a mournful cry" that's what let me know that infact it was a wolf! Great job on the poem thought! I'm looking forward to more of your work!

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    Re: Ma-he-can

    hey Blue your a smart one^_^I'm glad all of you read my poem and live life to the fullest!

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