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    A man can have.

    Thank you.
    For confirming what I always knew.
    That a man will do,
    What he wants to do.

    That a man makes his own world turn.
    A man decides what makes him smile.
    Makes his heart bleed and his soul burn.

    A man could have a worshiper of the very ground he walks.
    And he could loath, and punish her...
    ... With every door he locks.

    A man can have child. And he could stay to watch it grow.
    And still, he takes another route.
    Will he reap what he sows?

    He could have love and happiness at his fingertips...
    And let it slip away.
    Or have drama, chaos, and deception... and beg for it to stay.

    Thank you for confirming...
    What I already knew.
    It only hurts a little...
    Because I expected more from you.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: A man can have.

    Wow. I really liked this poem! It has a been there, done that feeling to me. I like your wording and how well you put it together. Good job! I hope to see more from you.

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    Re: A man can have.

    Yeaaaahhh... I can't say I like this all to much. I've got to stop writing on a whim. Although sometimes it works.
    Anywho, Thank you for the comment.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: A man can have.

    That's quite nice. I actually enjoyed reading it. It's kind of powerful.. cuts a little deep as well. Very nice. Thank you for sharing it.

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    Re: A man can have.

    ... wonderfully written... i love the way you play with words...

    A man can have child. And he could stay to watch it grow.
    And still, he takes another route.
    Will he reap what he sows?
    This part i likey... nicey.. nicely done

    The flow was excellent and whats conveyed were very vivid... @.@ love the descriptions... nice... a deep poem.. ^^

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