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    Talking Times when I want to die

    Nothing

    Bored out of my mind.
    I must be crazy.
    Nothing to do.
    Maybe I am just lazy.

    I sit and ponder.
    Just thinking about you.
    Mind full of wonder.
    What am I going to do?

    The day you left,
    Was the day my heart turned to stone.
    I think to my self,
    When will you come home?

    I need you now,
    And I know you need me.
    I am nothing you know.
    Nothing when ur not next to me.

    Broken

    The way she looks

    I just can't help but stare

    When she looks at me

    It is as thought I am not there

    Feeling lost

    Memories forgotten

    Endless loss

    My heart broken

    Love me

    Divided we stand
    Parted by one
    Your heart I demand
    She desires your love

    Loving you are
    Love me you don't
    Faithful to her
    Be mine you won't

    Death

    In pain

    Broken

    Heart slain

    Forsaken

    Love lost

    Heart bleeding

    Deep frost

    Pain fleeting

    Save me tonight

    I AM THE SHADOW

    I am the shadow of all.

    Always there But never noticed.

    Walked on every day and not a word of care is expressed for me.

    I am the shadow of all.

    Have you noticed me?

    I am the shadow of all.

    You see me only when you are alone.

    I am the shadow of all.

    The darkness swallows me whole.

    Tired

    Tired of being ignored

    Tired of being let down

    Tired of being a mistake

    Tired of never being happy

    Tired of being alone

    Tired of not knowing what to do

    Tired of being here

    And tired of not being able to have you

    Un-titled (if you have an idea for this title
    please speak up)



    Tired of being let down

    Tired of being cast aside

    Every blow crushing,

    To ones' pride

    You've left me no choice

    And now I say good-bye

    I'll miss the sound of your voice

    And the love I had inside

    Bold I once was

    But bold no more

    Heart shattered to peices

    Crushed into the floor

    Leftwithout answers

    And never knowing why

    Here is my last words to you

    "Good-bye"

    You never saw me


    I saw you but

    you never saw me

    I liked you but

    you never liked me

    I admired you but

    you never admired me

    I fell for you but

    you never fell for me

    I needed you but

    you never needed me

    I cried for you but

    you never cried for me

    I was there for you but

    you were never there for me

    And I stiLl love you but

    you still dont love me
    Last edited by starfire1036; Oct 10, 2007 at 04:23 PM. Reason: I needed a new title :P

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    Re: Times when I want to die

    Quote Originally Posted by starfire1036 View Post
    Nothing

    Bored out of my mind.
    I must be crazy.
    Nothing to do.
    Maybe I am just lazy.

    I sit and ponder.
    Just thinking about you.
    Mind full of wonder.
    What am I going to do?

    The day you left,
    Was the day my heart turned to stone.
    I think to my self,
    When will you come home?

    I need you now,
    And I know you need me.
    I am nothing you know.
    Nothing when ur not next to me.

    Broken

    The way she looks

    I just can't help but stare

    When she looks at me

    It is as thought I am not there

    Feeling lost

    Memories forgotten

    Endless loss

    My heart broken

    Love me

    Divided we stand
    Parted by one
    Your heart I demand
    She desires your love

    Loving you are
    Love me you don't
    Faithful to her
    Be mine you won't

    Death

    In pain

    Broken

    Heart slain

    Forsaken

    Love lost

    Heart bleeding

    Deep frost

    Pain fleeting

    Save me tonight

    I AM THE SHADOW

    I am the shadow of all.

    Always there But never noticed.

    Walked on every day and not a word of care is expressed for me.

    I am the shadow of all.

    Have you noticed me?

    I am the shadow of all.

    You see me only when you are alone.

    I am the shadow of all.

    The darkness swallows me whole.

    Tired

    Tired of being ignored

    Tired of being let down

    Tired of being a mistake

    Tired of never being happy

    Tired of being alone

    Tired of not knowing what to do

    Tired of being here

    And tired of not being able to have you

    Un-titled (if you have an idea for this title
    please speak up)



    Tired of being let down

    Tired of being cast aside

    Every blow crushing,

    To ones' pride

    You've left me no choice

    And now I say good-bye

    I'll miss the sound of your voice

    And the love I had inside

    Bold I once was

    But bold no more

    Heart shattered to peices

    Crushed into the floor

    Leftwithout answers

    And never knowing why

    Here is my last words to you

    "Good-bye"

    You never saw me


    I saw you but

    you never saw me

    I liked you but

    you never liked me

    I admired you but

    you never admired me

    I fell for you but

    you never fell for me

    I needed you but

    you never needed me

    I cried for you but

    you never cried for me

    I was there for you but

    you were never there for me

    And I stiLl love you but

    you still dont love me
    For the untitled poem i think a good name would be good-bye it pretty much some up the whole poem.
    I sEe YoU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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    Re: Many poems i have written over time

    Starfire, you write some of the best poems that I've ever heard of! 'You Never Saw Me' pierced my soul like a dagger.

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    Re: Many poems i have written over time

    Hmm... very good poems very nice indeed...I like the way you rhymed... very nice ^^
    im a poet too but im still new to rhyming... and...another thing is... spell correctly in poems.. don't shorten the words.. ^^ it will be nicer that way

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    Re: Many poems i have written over time

    Quote Originally Posted by RayMe View Post
    Hmm... very good poems very nice indeed...I like the way you rhymed... very nice ^^
    im a poet too but im still new to rhyming... and...another thing is... spell correctly in poems.. don't shorten the words.. ^^ it will be nicer that way
    i dont shorten my words do i? >.< can you show me where ?

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    Re: Many poems i have written over time

    ahh you edited... good to see that ^^ good job now it's much better ^^

    Hmmm i would like to ask you to give your opinion on my latest poem...would you do that? and i recommend you to write a poem for Poem of the Month ^^ read the rules first ok..

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    Re: Many poems i have written over time

    OK so this is my opinion and please think about it...ok
    so the un-titled poem should be called good-bye like reddragon said.
    it sums it up perfectly, next try to write for poem of the month. I know that you can do it..
    and lastly do not forget to reread the poems before you post. because in one of them you have two words without a space.
    but other than that I liked all of them.

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    Re: Many poems i have written over time

    Quote Originally Posted by overload View Post
    OK so this is my opinion and please think about it...ok
    so the un-titled poem should be called good-bye like reddragon said.
    it sums it up perfectly, next try to write for poem of the month. I know that you can do it..
    and lastly do not forget to reread the poems before you post. because in one of them you have two words without a space.
    but other than that I liked all of them.
    mistakes are what make poems works of art
    not every piece of art is semetric like you know what i mean
    so ill just leave them be u know what they say so i guess it is allright

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