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    For Me

    The other name is I'll crawl into my eggshell and hope I don't get scrambled.. I plan on turning this into a song if I have enough time... [it would be better as a song I think]

    For me
    (I'll crawl into my eggshell and hope I don't get scrambled)



    The clock has no sympathy for me
    It still tolls in my wake,
    Never bothering to fall back for me
    Not trying to be fake,

    For me

    But when the air thins for me
    It’s too close to a deathly fate
    This scene is too still for me
    If only disaster wouldn’t wait

    For me

    The crescent moon grows
    And disappears again
    Maybe it knows
    That the tides are dying to kiss it’s feet
    And grin

    Now the sun has come for me
    Taking a breath,
    After diving in the sea for me
    Only to trick my lying eyes

    For me

    This azure sky sings to me
    As it’s birds swim in it’s hue ,
    It soothes my wounds for me
    Making our tiresome night new

    For me

    The gibbous moon glows
    And disappears again
    Maybe all of it’s woe
    Has been confined and inhaled
    Within

    So they trade their places
    For me

    But they couldn’t go back
    For me

    All they knew was taught
    For me

    As night’s servant comes
    For me

    The full moon knows
    It’ll reappear again
    Maybe it will have to sew
    The stitches that were made for me
    In my pale skin

    Now night is too still for me




    The inspiration of this poem comes from the fall out boy concert I went to. lol Or, more specifically, Chicago. Northerly isles Chicago is cool... Aquariums, Planetariums, museums, beaches, and venues.
    People who live there are lucky.
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    Re: For Me

    wow talk about small writing, almost had to get my magnifing glass out then other than that it was amazing and fall out boy are pretty cool



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    Re: For Me

    This poem is wonderful, brightshadow!!! (But the texts were too small...) Anyways, i was fond on the imaginative descriptions that this poem had presented. Keep up the great job!

    Thank you very much,Reese for this wonderful signature ^_^

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    Re: For Me

    thanks for the comments. ^^ I really wanted some critique. lol
    [I changed the text so you can read it better]

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