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Reply With QuoteWow! You seem real pissed off between all that in your poem thats why I like it!!!! I love the hate in this poem!!! It makes it so exciting in a way!Hope to see more!
Me? What about you??? Even when I do nothing,
She still comes around.
Always pushing at my buttons,
and making whiny sounds.
I don't mention your name,
Yet you feel it is your place
To jump right in my business,
Like a meteor from space.
You blow shit out of proportion.
You're reading way too deep
In to things that don't concern you.
Why won't you let me be?
You say that it's my fault.
Yet, when a problem does arise,
We see that the issue is
coming from your side.
Why don't you listen to me?
Why can't you understand?
That I'm my own person, and
not your f****** man!
Don't worry 'bout what I do,
And don't worry about the past.
Just let me be my own man,
Then I can be a dad.
When you make me so uncomfortable
That I can't see my son.
It's not me you should be blaming,
You should be blaming number one.
For you're the one who did it all.
You pushed me so far away.
That I cannot be civil towrd you,
You filled me with this hate.
Wow! You seem real pissed off between all that in your poem thats why I like it!!!! I love the hate in this poem!!! It makes it so exciting in a way!
「When I'm sad, I stop being sad and be awesome instead」
Wow, the rhyming scheme really did it's job. I loved the way u made it short and sweet. The story line made it interesting as well.. description is overall creative QUOTE: Like a meteor from space. Love it!
Tolld you you were getting better. You definately rhyme better then me. But then I never really try. Maybe I should... Maybe I just really suck at everything except short stories.
Thanks, I'm glad you like it! ^_^ You too, Bratling. >_^ I've been doin' lots of writing and wasting of paper--to the point that my fingers hurt. I've written more lately than I draw.Originally Posted by elie26
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