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Reply With Quotethat is cool i like it alot it. you should put up more poems.
Michelle you said to me
Embracing me but you let me go so I can see
Without you you'll know I'll still love you
It makes me wonder if you feel the same too
The lies, the tears, the fights, and the rage
Having you always protected me from that making me feel lie a bird out of it's cage
Out here now I feel your hand holding mine
Understanding it was all lies as I list those fantasy in line
Though thanks to you I find out you and I will find our real love
You make me feel the same like the others saying I'm their angel above
Oh well now I can see we weren't ment to be
Understanding again that my true love is still waiting for me
It's an Acrostis so it's like YEAH!!!!! WooHOO!!!! I hope everyone likes it!
「When I'm sad, I stop being sad and be awesome instead」
that is cool i like it alot it. you should put up more poems.
it was good, lots of feeling... but i think it would help if there weren't so many pronouns like "you" and "i"... now, using it so often may tie into the them of the poem (you and the person you love), however if used too much it sounds repetitive...
so, if you'd like to review it, i'd suggest highlighting all the pronouns used, and then try to find a creative way to say what you feel without so many pronouns...
besides that, looks great!
i like the acrostics thingy too! very cute!
I thank you too so much!!! I thank you very much!
「When I'm sad, I stop being sad and be awesome instead」
good job kiwi*thinking*hmmmm...........mitchelle loljustkidding great work u thaught me something new 2day tnz love it by tha way♥(as well known as)the princess
Yeah, Bye.
@.@ wow~! such a creative work~! Subarashi kuwi chan~! kire~!!!
I never thought of making a poem this style... hmm... nice work *does the gai sensei nice guy pose*
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(u sure would win crosswords @.@ better not play this game with her ehehe...)
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I thank you both very much! I really thank you as well! I thank you so kindly!
「When I'm sad, I stop being sad and be awesome instead」
I really like it.It must have taken a while to come up with the words to spell out "without you" and for the poem to still make sense.i admire your work.great job
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