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    Re: Memoir of my Death

    Quote Originally Posted by SelfTorment View Post
    Thank you and don't worry i wouldn't take crediat of it.
    This poem is to good to come out of my mind and my teachers know that too.
    The real thing i like about this and why i want to use it is because I found myself
    in the same senerio as this person I didn't have an angel talk me out of it but the gun
    did misfire so maybe it was an angel or i need a new gun but thats in the past.
    Thank you again i'll tell you if my classmates like it or not is that alright?
    Sure man, and I'm really glad you liked it. I identify with the situation mainly because I tried to off meself too, but turns out suicide needs practice.
    Strange how things work, but I kind of had my own revelation at that point too.

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    Re: Memoir of my Death

    sorry but suicide doesnt really need practice i knew a man for a long time who was nice and he did not have any demons he was a happy person its just his back hurt and he got tired of it and killed himself but ive been at gun point before to and knife point i dont really feel like dieing anymore but people still want me dead its sucks, i wanna write a sudden realization from last night ,


    as i lie in my bed i stare and weep
    realizing an ungrateful father
    a mourning mother
    and a sister who has to prove im worthless
    all sit and laugh in the living room
    i sit and feel the darkness wrapping itself tightly around me
    it starts to get hard to breathe and makes me think
    i think about the world
    people are considered the cruelest animals of all
    whether they know they may be or not
    an old lady gets mugged on her way to her daughter's wedding
    you dont stop the thief why because what did she ever do for you
    why would you risk being killed for another person
    then watching on the news you find out a mother and her four kids are dead
    you think they were another bunch of sad bums
    but put yourself in their shoes when they were killed
    a mother defenseless to someone who had the intention from the start to kill
    what do you do?
    what about religion most people who have a religion try to say their religion is better
    some dont believe in trying to convert people
    but yet why must a pagan or atheist spit on the christian or the hindu
    because of their faith or because they think they are better?
    thats why when you think about the meaning of life isnt one thing but many
    one meaning is for those with a heart can live life to its fullest
    another meaning is to not hate those above you or pity those below you
    as humans the meaning of life can go on and on
    and many dont understand having a heart you must show fear, anger, sadness, etc.
    but also not to run away from these feelings
    to have a heart is to help what you can such as the old lady
    most people who dont help show they may not be truly living
    life is just an illusion we have until death which just shows us suffering
    why we musnt die though is your afraid not because you'll be dead but you wonder
    the thing you wonder is whether god is truly real
    people you may disagree but trust me
    not just that but the atheist wonders why someone would believe in a god
    answer is simple to make dieing less painful
    also because those with hearts are one with their soul
    so tell me after reading this what is my life worth to you?
    what is the old lady's life worth to you?
    most important what is your life worth to you?

    Fear is a state of mind
    to me fear does not exist

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    Re: Memoir of my Death

    i really enjoy reading this poem is was very meaning ful you have a lot going for you keep it up and dont lose sight.
    I've lost everything I once held dear to me all i have felt is hope and with it I''ll push myself forward and follow the even ending stream of life.....

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    Re: Memoir of my Death

    The format needs a little bit of work, as it is right now it comes off somewhat distracting. No real comprehension either. Title is misleading also.

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    Re: Memoir of my Death

    Quote Originally Posted by KenX View Post
    The format needs a little bit of work, as it is right now it comes off somewhat distracting. No real comprehension either. Title is misleading also.
    Sorry about that. It wasn't originally going to be a poem, but I messed with verse and its sloppy right now.
    I posted this before I got my journal, but if I had it before, I'd rather put it in there.
    But the reason the title is what it is because I wanted to give the feel that instead of his life flashing before his eyes before he died, he glimpse a little bit of the world of the dead. Which seems peaceful, but it's well..dead. And the absence of life is what would make him regret what he was about to do.

    thanks for the criticism, 'cause now I know what to work on.

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    Re: Memoir of my Death

    *Quoting the whole poem is not needed* ~ Aceman67

    HEY! EMO don't mind if I can use it on my English Class or something else?(I will owe you TONS OF GRATITUDE!) ....or(to have a see in my friends in here)
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    I loved her so much.... i would dare to risk my own life only to save her from dying....
    I loved my GF...
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    Re: Memoir of my Death

    Sure, anyone can use it as long as they give me gratitude. =D

    and nice lines Akaryu, I could relate to them a lot, keep it up. You could should try rhymes too, I'd like to see how that turns out.

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    Re: Memoir of my Death

    thanks dude it just came to me, now anyone else have any awesome poems to write???

    Fear is a state of mind
    to me fear does not exist

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