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    Memories

    *ahem* dedicated to:-
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    hope u guys like it. every word written here is all true. enjoy

    Memories

    With trembling fingers
    I slowly open and reveal you bit by bit
    Careful not to break or hurt that fragile part of you


    I can't breathe...not even blink
    Caught up with the rush of memories
    Tears of joy floweed within seconds
    As I gaze transfixed at these simple
    yet so meaningful pieces of paper and ink


    You are something that I can never forget
    Never turn back and
    Never regret


    You have the ability to open the sky
    Whenever the clouds surround me
    You showed me the path
    The right way that I should lead


    My little book,
    Holding all the pictures and faces
    Every word, phrase and sentence
    Is something I hold so precious, near and dear


    Here I am, standing so boldly
    Revealing myself to each and everyone of you
    I love you all so much
    Really, I do.


    pls comment. ^^

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    Re: Memories

    Elie, I love the way you put your emotions you put into your poems ^_^ Its touching and so true!

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    Re: Memories

    ur poems elie always come from the heart. i just love them. great poem elie, truely great.

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    Re: Memories

    wow, elie i'm so honoured to get a mention in ur decitation. Anyway, i luv this. It describes how we got to know u, girl. U got skill, dnt put urself k? Anyway nice one.

    Thanks for the siggy Ky-lyrra

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    Re: Memories

    wow, I really like this poem, even though i'm not on the dedication list...Great work, haha!

    o~Piggy-san~o

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    Re: Memories

    to be honest? i like it ^_^,

    YOu need to remove the very last line it takes away from the flow of the ending of the poem in my opinion. the last line "really, i do." feels like u forced it in.
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    Re: Memories

    I liked it! ^.^

    This was my favourite verse,
    You are something that I can never forget
    Never turn back and
    Never regret
    I loved how you rhymed it!!

    Remember, a poem a day keeps the mood swings away! :P J/k j/k (Well it does for me anyways XD)

    TY Sasurai for the lovely sig!*

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    Re: Memories

    it was really good! very emotional.

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