That was a super poem on the way its layed out but has a very sad ending.
Memories of us...
It starts supernaturally,
my love it sprouts beautifully.
Gradually we get closer than ever,
so close we think we will never part.
Talk about your love for animals,
It is not what i love but i can't wait for another of ur calls.
Deep in your arms,
with your palm pressed to my face.
Talk about having two childs,
fly across the mild winds to me.
Miles and miles away,
so we may lay in each others grace.
I can still remember our first time,
it is still fresh and sharp tasted like a lime.
How brave of you to conquer your fears,
you tears down and put me deep in you.
I used to tell how the breeze would feel by the beach here,
I would like to teach you about my religion while eating pies.
We discussed about our daughter's future,
we even had fun and adventures in between.
The silly kisses to my tounge,
to the passionate ones that burn my lungs.
I was fried to crisps when i hear we might never see again,
when all seems lost and struggles are vain.
Silently my heart shuts down,
blackness was sown deep in my chest.
The months we whittled and spent together,
Slowly fade and blown futher into the black hole.
Half dead like a fish exposed to the sun,
the seas of our love is now runs dry.
I was desparate to fill it up to survive,
and she pours in time so i could be alive.
So much trust you put on this sinful person,
so much love you gave for this guilty person,
so much hope you have for this useless person,
so much chances you made for this idiot person !
We both seek for happiness,
but now you end up in the darkness.
I lied,
you cried...what could i possibbly do now?
Did this a while ago ^^![]()
what u guys think of it? ^^
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That was a super poem on the way its layed out but has a very sad ending.
I think it's really amazing Ray..... But i actually have a question for you, is it supposed a sad poem or a sweet poem?? because it sounds like there's a little sweet and a little sad in the poem
^^ lol.. thx...im glad u like it ^^ but naw..
it's not super ^^ thx man~! ^^ i'll try and write more.. hmm...]
It's a mix of both? dunno ^^depends on how u think it is ^^ ty man
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little bro its so sweet but sad at the same time. I like how it is well writen and how the feeling are playing about. Keep up the good work. I have to find more of your poems.![]()
This was beautiful... But so sad when all one has is memories. The good thing about memories is... they never die.
... Not Ever Again...
Ty sis ^^ yup.. they are still commentable..![]()
a few is.. ^^ and sure ^^ i will do so...
Thank you peach..glad u think so ^^ and yes it;s the good side of memories but it's also the bad one.. @.@ if its a bad memory,..it'll eat u alive if they never die... :x like parasite~! @.@
Last edited by RayMe; Sep 18, 2007 at 05:21 AM.
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Well there's always amnesia for bad memories... Like on cartoons when they get knocked on the head and forget everything.
... Not Ever Again...
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