Very nice poem. I feel it can be worked upon. The narration and choppiness of the poem can be improved. Also, the fact that you use "you" in the second stanza.. it just doesn't fit in with the rest of the poem. Here, let me show you:
The entire poem is just about you and your lover, who isn't really there.. Or is he?The stars become his eyes
Those beautiful dark brown eyes
They draw you in, memorize you
As everything else seems to vanish
Anyway, That line. It corrupts the poem. The word, "you" murders the intimacy of the two characters involved, because you're letting the reader invision themself. That would be nice - if that is the effect you were looking for, but seeing as how the rest of the poem is written between "you" and "him", bringing in a third party view will ruin the moment. The urgency of it all.
The ending can be worked upon as well. I felt it was rushed, and not thought through.
It was a good poem, BrokenLover, with just a few bumps that can be overcome. =)
*Also, I don't think you meant to say memorize in that highlighted line. I think the word you were going for was mesmerize