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    The moment

    i didnt made it rhyme, coz i wanted it to be meaningful. i was short of time, so tis is wat i could come up with-

    An uncomprehendable feeling is inside me
    As i lay my eyes on him

    My heart was pumping like never before
    I would not move even uf the earth beneath me crumpled

    At the seize of the moment, time stopped
    I wouldn't breathe as i waited for his reaction

    The answer wasn't dissapointing
    Wave of joy flowed within me

    Just standing there, looking at you
    Is a gift of joy

    I knew at that moment
    My life was about to change forever

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    Re: The moment

    It's good Elie, keep up the awesome poetry ^_^

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    Re: The moment

    lol, i wonder wen this poem was made about. Such a gd one elie. Keep it up

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    Re: The moment

    wow elie i didn't know you write poems, your poem was kool, keep it up.

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    Re: The moment

    very nice job, it gives hope to the singles around here lol.
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    Re: The moment

    Quote Originally Posted by ketaro
    wow elie i didn't know you write poems, your poem was kool, keep it up.
    u didnt? i already posted bout 5 poems....and thx...

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    Queen of Big words. I like it elie. Go for it girl.
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    Re: The moment

    Hehe, I kind of made one like this before and my teacher didnt like it........ so, sorry, I guess it left a bad impression on me......

    But I liked the layout though........ two lines each paragraph. Nice and fast, just like the poem itself
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