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    The moment she woke up

    The moment she woke up

    She didn't reach for her smiley face cup
    She falls out of bed
    But didn't bump her head
    Instead, she headed for the bathroom
    At least it smells nice in there
    But, oh! Gross!
    The toilet seat's wet!
    She takes her shower.
    Hey, there's even hot water.
    But, oh! Crud!
    She's all out of shampoo.
    Next it's time to get dressed
    She's all out of clean under wear!
    Unto this, she is distressed.
    Until she finds herself in her favored shirt.
    Into the kitchen she goes!
    Their all out of waffles.
    `Guess she'll go hungry.
    And once again she's distressed

    Sh'e at school, all is well.
    Oh what is she saying! This is hell!
    Her friends are all sick,
    Today's homework stack is thick!
    She felt she'd never hear the last bell.
    Okay, so here she is at lunch.
    She was hungry at brunch!
    Come now, she never had breakfast! Give her more fries!
    Because it's your beef burgers she will despise!
    Shewalks through the hall.
    English class will be a ball.
    Ha! Yeah, right.
    She better hurry as she passes this girl fight.
    She made it to the door!
    She's safe! She's free!
    She sees her friend who was sick, and ask where
    He'd been, and tells her “I got here at 1:03”.
    She's happy for two seconds,
    When someone shoots a spitball at her.
    She's now in last period, her head on the desk.
    And there be the joyous bell
    Of a thousand angels in the heavens!
    Or more like an annoying buzz!
    But at least she gets to go home.
    she tramped through the school door,
    See her house; go through the front door,
    And slam her bedroom door.
    May as well just go to bed.
    Ugh. What a horrible day!
    She knew she should have reached for her smiley face cup!
    The moment she woke up!

    This was so much fun to conger up! I had done this one a couple of months ago, I had put it up on 4 other sites so I thought it was time to put it up here!

    =^.^= Enjoy!


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    Re: The moment she woke up

    I like this... I like the whole story thing and I like the way you write. I'm entierly pleased with this. IT reminds me of how I Felt when I went to school and found out my best friend was sick or just didn't show up. I'd always call him on break of after school and be like "HEY JERK! IF I had KNOWN you weren't coming, I'd have stayed home too. We could have talked on the itnernet. Dorko."

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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    Yes! thats almost what i do, except i wait tell i get home to call him, and chew him out, thank you kindly for the comment! it's nice to know that people like my work!
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    Re: The moment she woke up

    Of course of course. Well you leave me such fantastic compliments on my work and I really liked this and the last one so the least I can do is return the favor.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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    Re: The moment she woke up

    Your so kind! ^.^ thank you~! I love your work as well! keep it up! come back any time!
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    Re: The moment she woke up

    nice ending... and my that day was'nt so bad after all.. ^^ love the rhymes though... keep it up ^^

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    Thank you RayMe very kindly! thanks I tryed, at the moment i wasnt planning on ryming but i thought what the hey! Why not!
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    Re: The moment she woke up

    That was great keep up the work! I loved it! You are a great poet I cant wait for more! This one was funny. sounds like some of my days.

    Thankx Highteckdudu

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