I read your poem and the idea was there. But i had found some things that needs to be revised.:
1. Peddle should be changed into petal
2. The division of ideas in every line should be arranged accordingly for the flow of the poem.
3. Punctuations in the right place is a must also.
4. The Capitalization of every first letter in each line
These are only suggestions in my own view. You make wonderful poems, keep it up.
Sorry I just didn't get that one. I think that you should only use a capital letter on a new line if you make a new sentence, or a new thought, which he didn't. I guess though if his thoughts weren't finished on the line, he should put a comma at the end of the line, but not capitalize the first letter of the next line, though. Just my thoughts, because that's how I do mine. Sorry if I'm wrong. I was just wondering.
Originally Posted by raja_psyche
Very nice poem. It had a few misspelled words,but it was still a good and true one.