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    Moments

    Every life is has a moment
    no matter if it's a peddle
    from a rose ,or the tear of
    a person with a broken heart.

    Moments make life worth living
    like the first kiss, the first hug, the first
    friendship ,the moments can make you
    smile ,the moments also have a down side.

    Moments can be hurtful sorrowful,
    and hateful making you bitter like
    fruit that has gone bad that wasn't
    picked at the right moment.

    both good and bad moments make each person
    different there no 2 moments that are alike,
    which why moments are special the pain out weighs
    the feeling of good for a lot of people which makes
    moments so rare and awesome.

    this poem is about how moments good or bad
    define a person for the better or the worst its
    who they are and ever you ,moments define life itself
    comments and sugestions are welcomed
    Last edited by HolderOfTheDarkChalice; Nov 08, 2006 at 07:11 PM.
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Moments

    OMG great poem "10" as alwayz!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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    Re: Moments

    Ok thats it, i keep seeing posting like !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! omg u get a 10
    but no critique at all, i am banning you from the poems section for 2 weeks!

    im sorry holder that you had to read such a awuful post to your poem.
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    Re: Moments

    Hey Bro awesome poem, but I agree with Jaderabbit at least he could've commented on your poems! I mean you put time, energy, and emotion into this poem and I'm pretty sure you want some feedback on your poem to help you improve or just to simply hear that a person liked it! Bro you are amazing to put out so many poems and this one in particular is outstanding because every minute in life does have a moment! Weather it's a moment to forget or remember this poem captures it! 5 out of 5 Bro!

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    Re: Moments

    Thank you Jaderabbit, I was sick of those posts as well.

    Very lovely poem, I loved the first stanza,

    Every life is has a moment
    no matter of it's a peddle
    from a rose ,or the tear of
    a person with a broken heart.
    I don't know why, this just stuck to my heart. It's true though, because I felt like you were saying that there are good things and then bad things and they are all important and I agree with you. Very nice poem.
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    I didn't pick it, but i let it grow
    For he's the one that's heaven sent. :
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    Wow, I'm glad that you've realized that. Only a few people I know only realizes that. Most of them asks me why bad things happen to them and why not good things. Well, your poem explains it. I love the fact about you writting about people make the way they are, their personality and who they are from the outside and probably from the inside. Keep it up.
    "I love you with all my heart that I can't explain how much in words."

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    Re: Moments

    thank you everyone i'm glad you got this poem
    and liked it moments are just one reason why i am
    who i am now my best friend and knows all about me
    and if it wasn't for the moments good and bad i would
    have never met her .

    and thanks jade i apreciate the help you to bro and glad you liked
    it
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Moments

    That was pretty deep man. I like this poem for its deep meaning.

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