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Reply With QuoteOMG great poem "10" as alwayz!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Every life is has a moment
no matter if it's a peddle
from a rose ,or the tear of
a person with a broken heart.
Moments make life worth living
like the first kiss, the first hug, the first
friendship ,the moments can make you
smile ,the moments also have a down side.
Moments can be hurtful sorrowful,
and hateful making you bitter like
fruit that has gone bad that wasn't
picked at the right moment.
both good and bad moments make each person
different there no 2 moments that are alike,
which why moments are special the pain out weighs
the feeling of good for a lot of people which makes
moments so rare and awesome.
this poem is about how moments good or bad
define a person for the better or the worst its
who they are and ever you ,moments define life itself
comments and sugestions are welcomed
Last edited by HolderOfTheDarkChalice; Nov 08, 2006 at 06:11 PM.
I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
Isolate and save you from yourself
OMG great poem "10" as alwayz!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Don't tell me the sky is the limit, when there are footprints on the moon
Ok thats it, i keep seeing posting like !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! omg u get a 10
but no critique at all, i am banning you from the poems section for 2 weeks!
im sorry holder that you had to read such a awuful post to your poem.
-Just another green eyed angel, distorted by mans love for hate-|THE INFAMOUS CHEETOS OVERLORD||IceNineKills|
Hey Bro awesome poem, but I agree with Jaderabbit at least he could've commented on your poems! I mean you put time, energy, and emotion into this poem and I'm pretty sure you want some feedback on your poem to help you improve or just to simply hear that a person liked it! Bro you are amazing to put out so many poems and this one in particular is outstanding because every minute in life does have a moment! Weather it's a moment to forget or remember this poem captures it! 5 out of 5 Bro!
Thank you Jaderabbit, I was sick of those posts as well.
Very lovely poem, I loved the first stanza,
I don't know why, this just stuck to my heart. It's true though, because I felt like you were saying that there are good things and then bad things and they are all important and I agree with you. Very nice poem.Every life is has a moment
no matter of it's a peddle
from a rose ,or the tear of
a person with a broken heart.
A white rose no longer alone
I know who's heart it is to represent
I didn't pick it, but i let it grow
For he's the one that's heaven sent. : I love you, my White Rose.: The Poop Forums
Wow, I'm glad that you've realized that. Only a few people I know only realizes that. Most of them asks me why bad things happen to them and why not good things. Well, your poem explains it. I love the fact about you writting about people make the way they are, their personality and who they are from the outside and probably from the inside. Keep it up.
"I love you with all my heart that I can't explain how much in words."
thank you everyone i'm glad you got this poem
and liked it moments are just one reason why i am
who i am now my best friend and knows all about me
and if it wasn't for the moments good and bad i would
have never met her .
and thanks jade i apreciate the help you to bro and glad you liked
it
I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
Isolate and save you from yourself
That was pretty deep man. I like this poem for its deep meaning.
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