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    (In this poem that i have here is my one hundred percent project that i have completed in my school and i wanted to share it to all of you members.)

    The enlightment of an hourly glass that deploys segement of life.
    A beautiful morning glare gazing at your eyes of dormancy.

    A long while has been set out to rejuevinate a young hearted outcast
    of meaningless tactics and deficiencies. My soul seeks an alternative
    feeling of life. The eternal darkness in my threaten heart.

    An everlasting down feeling toward one's love of my heavenyl world
    that struggles enviously at vein. My collisions snap out a fear of rejection
    in momentous life of clashing swords.

    The forgiveness in my eyes cast out shadows of regretion. I show my
    appreciation towards you, I place my arms around you when your down.

    The sincerity of your kinded heart from you, into breaking away my darkened
    heart.

    I call out you name to free my injured soul of rejuction. You aid me when I am not in control of my mind.

    Your sweetness convinced me into being in the surrounding light. The darkness shroud everything in my way of accomplishment, until i fall.

    Magic intervenes when there is love in first sight.
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    Re: Moments of Life

    wow your poem is really deep and emotional
    thats why i always loved reading your poems;
    you've come a long way since you started ^^
    keep up the good work
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    Re: Moments of Life

    Well in this poem that i have received a good effort with one huindred percent hard work ethic on this was mainly on from the feelings and emotions that was revolving in my stage of life, even though there are obstacles you have to face in the world you can go through with it during any day of your life.

    Magic intervenes when there is love in first sight.
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    Re: Moments of Life

    lots of fancy words.

    i really like it, the extravagance and it. some of the lines just blew me away.
    i don't really like the formatting, though i prefer strict stanzas.

    that doesn't diminish the wordplay in the poem however.
    super awesome job.
    the love you withhold is the pain you carry.

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    Re: Moments of Life

    Quote Originally Posted by FLawEdmiNd View Post
    lots of fancy words.

    i really like it, the extravagance and it. some of the lines just blew me away.
    i don't really like the formatting, though i prefer strict stanzas.

    that doesn't diminish the wordplay in the poem however.
    super awesome job.
    Yeah i know that it was not formatted into a stanza line but overall i did alrite with the lines i had put in with the feelings. At any rate the poems that i intentionally use are from the insperation i receive from. The extravagance i had in the poem, was that the point i am directing are from several emotions that people have faced through daily life. That is how everything life can be diversed in such a way that moments are indeed much better then anything else.

    Magic intervenes when there is love in first sight.
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