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    A Moments Wish

    Sun shines through the window,
    Elegantly showing a long, white dress.
    Surrounded by wide smiling people,
    Sharing the moment of one growing up.
    Music starts playing through the door,
    Tension starts to build quickly inside me.
    My curiosity talks full control,
    Doors then open wide as heads turn.
    Slowly I walk through trying not to trip,
    Everyone still stares and smiles.
    A tall, dark figure stands still up ahead,
    I continue to walk up to them.
    Happiness, excitement hit me quickly to the chest,
    Heart beating faster by the second.
    The figure turns, smiling back at me,
    Expressions of joy and happiness show.
    Only to slowly fade out of reach,
    For a moments dream has passed.
    Waiting for reality to bring it to life,
    The one day when I will change for better, for worse.
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    Re: A Moments Wish

    Marriage a moment in time where a woman can feel like a princess... I love this poem for the simple fact how you showed me/us & how women actually dream about that day to come & to have that *prince charming* waiting at the alter ready to take us for "better or worse" I also like how you put that in there too... lol < I must say keep up the good work> a friend told me that there were good poem writers on here, but I never thought this many & such creativity... > You are one of them < ^_^

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    Re: A Moments Wish

    Hah~! powerful description... well written indeed... and the flow was very good i love it...

    nicely done there ^^

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    Re: A Moments Wish

    Quote Originally Posted by Clorox View Post
    Marriage a moment in time where a woman can feel like a princess... I love this poem for the simple fact how you showed me/us & how women actually dream about that day to come & to have that *prince charming* waiting at the alter ready to take us for "better or worse" I also like how you put that in there too... lol < I must say keep up the good work> a friend told me that there were good poem writers on here, but I never thought this many & such creativity... > You are one of them < ^_^
    Awwwww thank you

    I tried to be more descriptive and not use obvious words. At least it helped with setting the feelings behind getting married. As a young girl waiting for that special day to arrive.
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    Re: A Moments Wish

    Such a great poem, very discreptive yet elegantly done.

    Then again marraige is a powerful emotion.

    Love to see more like this one, I take my hat off to you.



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    Re: A Moments Wish

    awww i love it it is so cute, you have outstanding description

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