yea this really shows gaaras feeling and it seems you really know this character.. nice job. keep up da good work
I was born
A monster,
Evil leaking
From my infant form
My mother
Died before
She could
See me
I still remember
Her lifeless eyes glistening
In agony,
A crimson spider web
Although I
Knew
She would
Have hated me
She died uttering
Curses across
The sea
Of sand,
Curses which brought me
Into the world
Curses and hatred
Created me
I was born
A monster,
A horrible
Terrible thing
Circles around
My eyes
Sadness pouring
From my heart,
Blue eyes
Light as a cloud
Though my mind
Is black
People would run
From me
And never
Look back
They were scared
Of me,
Thinking I would
Attack
Their screams
I still remember,
So frightened,
They could never understand
I tried to
Reach out
To help somebody
To see
I never meant
To hurt anyone
I was mad
Hotheaded as the sun
My face flushed
As I tried to hurt
Another who had run
I wish they would just listen
I tried to apologize
“ I never meant...”
But still they would not
Listen to me
Nobody understood
The sadness
The pain
I felt inside
My uncle
The one who
Wasn’t
Scared
Had taken care of me
When my father
Wouldn’t
All alone I would be
He caught me
Trying to
See what
Pain was
I didn’t know
Pain like you
It would never let me bleed
So I couldn’t feel
Yet throughout
My whole life
I knew what
It was
I felt a different
Kind of Pain
One that could drive
A normal person insane
My heart, my uncle
Had told me
Was hurting
The cure I did not have
He said the cure
Was love
My uncle made me
Believe that
He said I had
To earn it
I tried,
still everyone ran
I tried to apologize
As the all
Ran
Away
I tried to help them see
I could never,
Would never
Take them for granted
But Still
They ran
All of their footsteps
Echoing across the walls
Sadness enveloped me
Like a great
Black Sea
An endless abyss
Tears flooded
From my eyes
I’m trying to wipe them away
Wipe all the pain away
My uncle came
Masked as a
Murderer
In black
His attack ended
In vain
Only him
Ending up in pain
Dying, laying on
The ground
He stared up
At me
The his voice
Echoed throughout
My head
Screaming the truth
He had never cared
Never
Even
Dared
He had just lied
The whole time
He had hated me
For “killing” his sister
I wish
He could see
That I was not to blame
I am sorry
Blood dripping
From his lips
In a horrible
Final moment
At last
I realized
I was alone
In this sad world
I could have
Never imagined
The pain
I would feel
The pain is like
A spike through the heart
Nails through the skull
More pain than ever before
Love was no longer
There and
I would never see it
Again
I had no meaning
Nothing in life
But then I decided
What would do
He had tried to
Kill me
So now I will
Kill you
I had my
Meaning
Finally something
To do
To kill all
Who come
On my fathers
Orders
All who come
To challenge
The
Monster
So no one
Can kill me
No one can
Hurt me
Even those
So innocent
They’re just like assassins
My father sent
Love engraved
In my forehead
Bleeding to my chin
I walked on
My brother
So scared
My sister
Was terrified
To see me
Horrid face
Years went by
All in a blur
So many attempts
On my life
All of them
Made my monster blood stir
Like a poison
Throughout my skin
It made my stomach
Hunger for more
Sometimes It would
Come out
Without warning
At all
I was used as
A weapon
Against other
Nations
I was just a tool
Used by my father
The horrible
person he is
A new mission
Comes in
An exam to
Conquer
New people
I meet-
Weaklings all
Of them
Though new
Pain I feel
All over
And many bruises from the fight
Tried to kill him
Though I was stopped
By another weakling
Not worth the trouble
More people
A new foe
My blood
Leaking out
My form
Changing to
The horror
Of It’s face
Like a demon
From hell
Coming from
My Black heart
He is most puzzling
This blonde-haired person
Protecting his friends
Risking his life for them
They are my prey
Why would he care
If they died
He is just like me
Experienced the
Same pain as me
Being alone in the darkness
All alone
But he has found
Friends like I never
Could , still he
Wants to help
He has shown
Me friends are
Better than pain
I try to find them
First my brother
Then sister
Can see I have
Changed
Now I will forever
Know, me
With this blonde haired
Will be friends
He has taught me to
Try to become friends
With everyone
He has inspired inspiration
Now people respect me
As a leader
I would sacrifice my life
To save them all
I would endure
The pain
In the world
So they would know
So they would know
That they have a leader
I would suffer that
To save them all
I want them to know
I am not a monster
I am just and right
A marvelous
Now they have faith
In my choices
I would never
Put them in any danger
Memories of my past
come flooding back
In this never ending
darkness, called death.
A voice calling me
from the other side
Echoing in th long
Silence
The voice is concerned,
A person who wants to help me
A voice of
A friend
Now, I see somebody
Trying to reach me
Trying to help me
I remember He is my friend
As I come back from the
Darkness
Everyone surrounding me
Concerned looks on their faces
The all came to me
Wanting to do
What they could
To help me
They are my friend
Such contentment
They give me
They know I am not really just
A Monster
yea this really shows gaaras feeling and it seems you really know this character.. nice job. keep up da good work
My that was a long poem,but it was a really good one. To me it was kinda a cross between beauty and the beast and some monster movie. It was like beauty and the beast cause it seemed like he needed someone to love him as he was to feel normal. It was like a monster movie cause it like everywhere he went or everyone he tried to save always ran from him cause the thought he would hurt them. Great job and I can't wait to read your next one.
"Sunset Kisses Along The Beach"
Made for me by HolderofTheDarkChalice
Thanks so much I love it!
ya that poem was rele long and i think my scroller broke lol, well first i would say that you should edit it so that 4 lines match into one without double spacing, and like spin said, you probably got Gaara's character on spot. something i would recommend is using bigger language to describe gaara's evil, because longer words are usually more descriptive, and nice job.![]()
![]()
Want Credits Fast? Love The Thrill Of Gambling? Then Come On Down And See For Yourself!
http://www.animeonline.net/f5/nfl-football-31440/
Bookmarks