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    The moon, a city and a poet

    Moon shining brightly over the empty streets
    Single footsteps echoing between the sound houses
    A late night bus scrolling over the corner
    And a lonely poet sitting over by her window
    Gasping for fresh air
    Dreaming of someone
    Singing an ode to the moon

    A lovely old couple leaving their friends, going over the street- home
    Big city lights making the night seem as day
    Sounds of sirens so far away they seem unreal
    And a lonely poet watching the passing by hours

    Planes flying over one after another
    High chimneys of similar houses, casting smoke in the air
    A cyclist passing Your way slowly
    And a poet, the only one smiling about the lovely evening

    Green trees and lovely gardens to please the eye
    An old man walking his little dog
    Silence so peaceful it makes You cry
    And a poet trying to catch the moment on a piece of paper

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: The moon, a city and a poet

    wow very nice poem im dissapointed you still havent gone to rhyming poems but you know its still very good

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    Re: The moon, a city and a poet

    wow...brialiantly done....the atmosphere to this poem was very calm, yet sad and lonely... :/ one of ur best poem this is....i love this 1... good job ^^

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    Re: The moon, a city and a poet

    I must say this is very good,
    but I agree with Levitatinganimelover, I to am dissapointed that this is not a rhyming poem but good non the less

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    Re: The moon, a city and a poet

    WOW....i have no more words alot of emotions and writing i mean like oh my gosh keep it ↑ lasu
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    Re: The moon, a city and a poet

    wow...to me that was very beautiful. it was just so peaceful. i loved it!! =)

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    Re: The moon, a city and a poet

    Thank You guys!!!!!!!! ^^ I'm glad you all liked it...

    And I have been writing rhying poems too lately, but this is one of the poems inspired by a moment and I prefere to make those simple, so I could put all I feel in it ^^

    Thank You all!!!!!!!!

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: The moon, a city and a poet

    Well I have to say, Im impressed with your ability to make a smooth poem, full of rythm... That DOESNT rhyme. And your work has something that is hard to pack into the "prison" that rhyming can often create... Thats imagery. Not that you can't have both... But it is much easier to describe an environment without being chained to rhyming words. You have done so perfectly here... And also filled your reader with much emotion.
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