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![]() King Of Darkness Join Date: May 2006 Location: someplace where the only light is the moon above
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![]() ![]() Credits: 2,476 | Moon Light Sanata Gone Mad "Remake" A tear drop's on the ivory key's, a memory flash'es before his eye's as the music shows his pain, a woman's voice is rememberd as he grits his teeth in anger . The moon over head atleast is reflecting off his glass of age old wine. he remembers how They draged her away in the night out of fear of her kind. He could do nothing but watch as she faded away and, the flames danced around her flesh ,the keys now quickining as the tears flow more freely , a soft wimper can be heard from him. It is now early in the morning as her face becomes more clear in his head not knowing or thinking he bangs the keys harder as the melody becomes more emotional. As his verosity is more inept than ever as his finger's start to bleed from the harshness of the way the key board is being played. He stands while he is till playing and smiling, yes smiling he is no longer sad because he know's he will soon join his love in the eternal bliss of death, the moon now fading. As the sun rises ,smoke comes from him as he play's more eratic he take's one last sip of that wine and he bursts into flame saying "a toast to you my love with a tear in my eye and blood on my lips" ..............Then he is gone never more to exsit ok i redid a poem i wrote when i very first joined AO and was hoping those of you who saw that one could tell me if this is a bit better. and any comments or tips would be helpfull |
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![]() ![]() Credits: 1,693 | Re: Moon Light Sanata Gone Mad "Remake" This is an awesome poem, its really deep too and kinda sad.
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![]() ![]() Credits: 3,195 | Re: Moon Light Sanata Gone Mad "Remake" WOW!!! Now this was soooooooooooooooo awesome Big Bro! I loved it!! ![]()
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![]() ![]() Credits: 309 | Re: Moon Light Sanata Gone Mad "Remake" hmph (concentrate) now this is the crimsom ange i knew this poem is so awesome and dark i give it a 100!
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![]() ![]() Credits: 2,476 | Re: Moon Light Sanata Gone Mad "Remake" thanks im glad everyone liked it its way better than my first attempt im sort of glad i re-did it |
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![]() ![]() Credits: 309 | Re: Moon Light Sanata Gone Mad "Remake" I thougthed the first part was good though.
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![]() ![]() Credits: 2,476 | Re: Moon Light Sanata Gone Mad "Remake" thanks i mean the hole porm its self this is a remake from the origanle i posted when i first joind i can send you a link to see it if you want then you can see how bad i sucked at my first attempt |
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![]() ![]() Credits: 1,451 | Re: Moon Light Sanata Gone Mad "Remake" wow *speechless* it was deep, shocking, and depressing. it was very well thought out. very nice
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![]() King Of Darkness Join Date: May 2006 Location: someplace where the only light is the moon above
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![]() ![]() Credits: 2,476 | Re: Moon Light Sanata Gone Mad "Remake" i liked that poem it really is a sweet poem about love and wanted to be held . i can relate to that |
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