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    Moonlight

    As the moonlight cannot shine through the scattered clouds.What seemed like an eternity has finally come together to form a fragile heart.

    Once i gaze into your dark eyes just like gazing at the stars,I lose my self.Only able to look away for what seemed like an eternity was a few seconds.Even in the darkest of nights a smile from you can make me forget where i have been for so long.


    Finally able to bask in the beauty of the moon,I can only hope this lasts forever.




    I need a better name for this poem hehe advice?
    be honest is it any good?!

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    Re: Moonlight

    You have to look between the lines sometimes to find a title for a poem.

    And I actually like the format of this one. It read like a story, which gave me a certain feeling I really cant describe.

    Well done.
    Seduced by Flesh


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