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    More Haiku for You

    I had written these and think that something is wrong with them, can you tell me if my syllables are right?

    Behold the meadow
    Fire burning all around
    Where has the life gone

    A tree of plenty
    Has grown inside the forest
    Of my empty heart

    Laughing shadows run
    Playing merrily alone
    Joy masks the sorrow

    Thirteen animals
    The cat, rabbit, and the ox
    Favorites of mine

    The emptiness grows
    The darkness never fading
    Life has been silenced

    Mythical volumes
    The books dusty on the shelf
    Forgotten and dead

    Cold frozen wasteland
    Lifeless forests of branches
    Frigid winter snow

    Leaves floating downward
    Colors of red and orange
    The calm autumn wind

    Opening flowers
    The fragrant scent of roses
    All grows in spring rain

    Well, what do you think?
    Pretty good for one day's work.
    If your happy and you know it make a kitty!!! =^_^= <Meow!

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    Re: More Haiku for You

    I like them really, really much... you made the due one day? Great!!!!!!! You're really talanted.

    My favourites are the second, because I love forest and I like the idea of that one, the third one is great- "Joy masks the sorrow"- so true, I mask my sorrow with joy all the time- fooling around and acting "shiny", the fifth is about death... I love that fact... different from any of the haiku I've read and the last one about spring rain... lovely!!!!!!!!!

    Reall, really nice!!! I love your haiku!

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: More Haiku for You

    These have to be the most beautiful English written haiku I've ever read! I don't even know what to say; I'm speechless. I envy your haiku skills.

    Mad props! You get a 5/5 in my book! ^_^


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    Re: More Haiku for You

    Oh!!!
    Arigato!!!
    I'm glad that I've impressed so many people!
    Are they really that good?
    I'm extremely negative towards my own creations, so if it is worth that much praise then I should go easier on myself.
    If your happy and you know it make a kitty!!! =^_^= <Meow!

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