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    These were wrote seperately but a lot have told me they seem like they should go together.

    Butterflies & Roses

    Butterflies and roses
    sweet scents filling noses
    lovers holding hands in a park
    cupids arrow again hit the mark
    passion in a thought
    blessed is all god has wrought

    A man looking on
    realizes half his life has gone
    saddened he turns away
    hoping love finds him some day
    though the park he strolls
    in the distance a church bell tolls

    Serenity

    the wind gently blows
    the green grasses slowly grow.
    birds on high are singing
    while in the church below
    choir voices are ringing
    lovers walking
    old women talking
    a picture of serenity
    never ment to last for eternity.
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    awww my faves poems by you Silver!!!

    Still thing Serenity Rules!!!
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    Hmm. Yes, the second should be edited to compliment the first. Other than that? Capitalization would be nice.
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    Thank you Kasai

    some day i might get around to mergeing them, i feel they are some of my better work, though i think my favorite i've ever written was the one i wrote for my grandmother (posted on diff thread) and yea these ones deserve better punctuation and capitalization, they are less free verse and more traditional.
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