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![]() Credits: 49,192 | More than Pain Well this is something really angry, at least that's how I see it... Warning! It' s fictioned- not about real life... To understand That you shall not help me When I lie wounded on the ground, Drowning in my own blood, Crying out the last tears of hope, Cursing the day I was born. To understand is harder than bear the pain... To be exchanged For someone else in town. To be ignored While screaming out promises of past. To be forgotten And left all alone to cry. To be unwanted Is more painfull than dying. What have I done? To earn this? Why do you make me Fell the way I do? Why can't I accept That nothing is forever? |
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![]() Credits: 49,192 | Re: More than Pain Wow!!! now you' re a fast reader!!! ^^ Thank you very much... I' m glad you like it so much! It' s just something that came into my mind last evening... and I had enough anger in me to pull it through... |
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![]() ![]() Credits: 14,170 | Re: More than Pain wow I love it alot of emotion into every word. wowo I like it alot. keep up the good work.
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![]() ![]() Credits: 2,215 | Re: More than Pain When\if you do learn to accept it. Please tell me how you did it. Although, its the purity and innocents in a person that induces the belief that maybe... "nothing" won't last much longer. The good in us, makes us believe that somethings DO last forever. Some call it... hope. Hope in forever makes alot of sense if you have faith in loyalty. But lately, loyalty seems like it isn't worth a penny. Loyalty is almost rare enough to be sold on the black market. No wonder we're all so lost. |
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![]() ![]() Credits: 59,118 | Re: More than Pain @.@ laura...such a sad poem... sheesh... :/ 10/10... thats my rating...now wheres the tissue box... |
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![]() Credits: 49,192 | Re: More than Pain Why thank You very much guys!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ^^ @ Princess: I'm glad you like it... and I'm glad those emotions can be felt... And I always try my best when it comes to AO ^^ @ Peach: I don't think I' ll be able to ever accept it... I always have hope... and I'll always have faith in loyality and will be deceived many times... But in the end, I'm sure it' ll be alright... it always ends the same ayways.... @ Ray: Oh... don't try to tell me it made you cry... I know it couldn' t possibly ^^ Could it? @.@ 10/10!!!!!!????? WoW!!!!! Thank You!!! I didn't think it was that good.... |
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![]() ![]() Credits: 59,118 | Re: More than Pain xD good one..it went way off charts.. uuh..did i cry...i don't remember already...sheesh @.@ |
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![]() ![]() Credits: 425 | Re: More than Pain why do your poems seem better when your mad i dont but i love this one better than the last one keep up the great work*this was first one ive read today*i love the work lasura
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![]() ![]() Credits: 1,484 | Re: More than Pain Very strong. I like it very much. It seems like poems that are somewhat out of anger show greater emphasis.
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![]() Credits: 49,192 | Re: More than Pain Thank You Chaos and halo3!!! ^^ @ halo3master: I guess it's just like Chaos said. I guess anger is a very strong feeling and I need emotions to write something good- I just put all those emotions in some words. That is why those of anger and pain are better then others... I think I'll never be a writer good enough to write a good poem just because it is asked and not because those are just feelings I have to put down on paper. I'll make sure to get better in my works ^^ Thank You very much for always supporting me ^^ And thank You levitatinganimelover for the 15/10!!!!! That's something WoW!!! ^^ And then it's clear that you didn't cry Ray ^^ you'd remember that... |
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