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    More Than Words!

    My life is what i made it and so was what
    i did to have you by my side , everything
    thing i have shown you has been so real
    that you need more than words to show
    that you love me.

    What would you do? , to have my love
    and to keep it forever so that no one
    could ever make it there's? , saying you
    love me just isn't enough when words are
    all you give me.

    What would you do , if my heart was
    torn in two and that your love for me
    is more than real was meant just for me
    baby i know you love me but actions they
    say speak louder than any word that can be
    spoken.

    How would you act if your words no longer
    affected me like they did when we first met?
    would you let things go or would you hold me
    tight as the wind blew over me in the midnight air
    things just wouldn't be the same if you showed your
    feelings and not just words.

    More than words make a love go strong so strong
    that words of love and hope would fade away becuase
    i would know just by your actions things just wouldn't be
    the same if you showed more than words that love is what
    you want me to have , more than words is all you have to
    do to make our love more than anything thing spoken could
    ever would or will.

    What would happen if saying i love you dosnt make
    things new for us these things i say are just words
    they mean nothing with out the actions behind them
    so let me show you what i mean by showing me the same
    more than words......

    this poem is to show how saying i love you is meaningless
    unless you back them with action becuase all things in life
    no matter how small or big really have no place in ones life
    with out showing how much it means to be with the one
    your with. comments and sugestions are welcomed
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: More Than Words!

    Very nice! a true love longing..
    More Than Words! (with exclamation??)
    Worth reading.
    Although try to avoid repitition of words.
    Check the spelling buddy, but not so many..
    Maybe it was your keyboard's mistake hehehehe..

    use commas so that the reader can breath
    and can trully understand your poem..

    aside from that, keep up the good job!

    If you don't like me, it's mind over matter.
    I don't mind and you don't matter

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    Re: More Than Words!

    lol umm yeah it as my keyboard anyway thanks for the
    comment and the repdeditveness i was working for a
    way to ask questions while not being so random with it.

    im still working on that though but thanks for the
    advice i will work with the ummm keybaord lol
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: More Than Words!

    Very sweet poem that makes so much sense. You can say I love you to the one you're with,but showing someone how much you love them is one of the greatest ways to do that other than marrying them. I can't wait to read more of your work.
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