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    Morrow

    I've fallen from the sunny clouds into the
    raging rain.

    Blurs of people buzz past me,
    I'm a million miles away.

    My eyes scan each white wall looking
    for something that's not there.

    Oh how your face falls into the slots of my
    mind throughout the long day.

    You help me push the panic away.

    My fingers sore from jotting pointless
    text.

    My mind wandering through miles of memories
    like a film strip.

    I wander these white halls like a child
    who has lost their way and has no hope.

    Early mornings with your voice
    and cool breath on my face have made my
    days dingy and dry.
    Dear Dinah...

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    Re: Morrow

    Wow!! You have a fan here! Another really great poem!
    I love how I could see this poem.
    You do that to me alot y'know. Its like when you write... Im all of the sudden whisped off to a moment in someone elses mind\life.

    You ever see "Being John Malkovich"?

    Anyway, imagery like that diserves an award.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: Morrow

    A very nice poem indeed... I like this very much- it talks about enjoying a moment, these lines:
    "Oh how your face falls into the slots of my
    mind throughout the long day.
    ***
    Early mornings with your voice
    and cool breath on my face"
    Just really make me think of how presious some moments, some things, some memories are...

    And this: "You help me push the panic away."
    Just so lovely to hear... makes me smile...

    This is a great poem, it shows the greyness of a simple day and how love can save you from going mad in this rutine...
    A really nice work ^^

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: Morrow

    Thank you both. I am glad that poems can do such wonders..I never thought in my life that they could but I regardless I suppose they do. I don't think I could ever be a great writer like Kevin Devine(singer)...but I can try. Thanks for the support both you ^-^
    Dear Dinah...

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