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    A moth

    A moth really knocked at my window one day and: "how I'd wish to let it in" was the first thing I thought... next was: "it's not what it needs" and the last one: "it's the same in life..."

    A beautiful white moth
    Knocks at my window
    Reaching for the light
    Shining oh so bright

    Oh how I'd wish to let it in
    To open the window
    And lead it to the light it seeks

    But I can not.
    For the light it craves for
    Is not the light in needs
    No love will it meet
    By the glass of the light-bulb

    I am a moth too,
    Knocking at your window,
    Screaming for your name,
    Craving for your scent...

    Will you open the window?
    And let the cold in?
    Will you welcome me in your life
    Knowing how You feel?
    Could you say no
    To the wish to see my wings?

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: A moth

    that is really nice really it is i like it alot i think it is really nice and meaning full think is one that i like alot

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    Re: A moth

    Why thank You very much Runebearer, I'm glad you like this poem...

    I don't find it as one of my best... but this is the best I can do without having very many feelings bursting in me... I've lost that ability a long time ago... need training now... I'll make better ones I promise ^^

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: A moth

    oO,nice wording,,,pretty cruel way to express how one loves another for brightness which is just deadly and cold as a light-bulb,as u said...this poem has pretty much everything,story,imaginary,jet solid wording,,,nice job

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    Re: A moth

    Quote Originally Posted by emptyus View Post
    oO,nice wording,,,pretty cruel way to express how one loves another for brightness which is just deadly and cold as a light-bulb,as u said...this poem has pretty much everything,story,imaginary,jet solid wording,,,nice job
    Why thank You very much!!! ^^ it's nice to hear that from you!!! Thank You very much... I like how you describe it: "for brightness which is just deadly and cold as a light-bulb" ^^ nicely said...
    But actually I must say my wording could be better... this poem seems quite pale for me... I really should extend my English vocabulary knowlege a bit...

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: A moth

    Thats quite a concept Lasura. This was very original work. And it makes me think about how much time I've spent knocking at windows. Wishing for things I don't need.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: A moth

    Well I'm glad it did then Peach!!! I really am- it's no good as you can understand... the moth usually pays with its life for that...

    Thank that moth that knocked at my window actually ^^ she was the one who made me think of this and write this poem ^^

    And thank you for your comment... I feel honoured ^^

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: A moth

    I thought it was a very deep poem and I thought it was a good analogy for loving someone because of "brightness" or outer beauty.

    Please correct me if I am wrong. lol


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