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    Motherearth I Have Lived

    This my newest poem, so everyone tell me what you think


    There's a pleasant light
    wafting through the sky tonight.

    I can hear the earth whispering
    sweet sins to lovers who have made their home
    on its body.

    Breathing I can feel my heart beat
    to the rhythm of the pulsing waves of life.

    I'm plowing over my thoughts
    and fumbling for the right words.

    There's a pleasant light
    wafting through the sky tonight.

    Maybe I'll be forgiven.

    I can feel the dark molding
    its way around my naked frame.

    Surfacing from this ocean made life,
    gasping I live for the night.

    The light hanging pleasantly in the
    sky is burning to light.

    Lovers and persons alike retreat
    to their lives again.

    Motherearth, tell me your secrets.
    Embrace me and fill my canvas with paint.

    I live. Again I live tonight.

    These stars now withered still burn bright.
    Dear Dinah...

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    Re: Motherearth I Have Lived

    Oh wow your so pro at poems really!!! Reading all this makes me think that real life is really like this. It was amazing! Hope to see more!
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    Re: Motherearth I Have Lived

    Aww, thankies! ^-^ I will be posting more poems soon, so keep a look out
    Dear Dinah...

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    Re: Motherearth I Have Lived

    interesting...its almost like ...a false sense of security...but you feel a special connection to the earth...this poem is very unique.

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    Re: Motherearth I Have Lived

    Yeah that was the feeling I was hoping to achieve. I am glad that it came through in the end.
    Dear Dinah...

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    Re: Motherearth I Have Lived

    I realike this, the imagery is very peaceful and scerene. Its like breathin in the air after it rains. The poem makes me want to embrace nature, y'know, like run around barefoot.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: Motherearth I Have Lived

    Quote Originally Posted by Peach_follows View Post
    I realike this, the imagery is very peaceful and scerene. Its like breathin in the air after it rains. The poem makes me want to embrace nature, y'know, like run around barefoot.
    lol treehugger at 6:00 lmao j/k nice way to put it (btw can I have a peach?)

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    Re: Motherearth I Have Lived

    I know I was like hehehe. It was pretty funny...I am glad that my poem makes people love trees XD.
    Dear Dinah...

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