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    Multiple personality.

    As much as she pisses and moans,
    About never being alone,
    The cause of her tears,
    And irrational fears,
    Life seems like it'd be so much
    easier to stand, and bare.
    Easier to stay and be there,
    If she really were,
    As unlovible as she feels.

    If no one truely cared,
    And never gave her a chance,
    If they left her alone,
    Didn't give her this dance.
    If they made her feel,
    As worthless as she does herself,

    This doll wouldn't ever have been broken.
    Let alone taken off the shelf.
    She'd still be a pretty perfect thing,
    To be coveted and cherished.

    But they took her down,
    Threw her around,
    And now she's simply broken.
    Yet some how they see,
    The beauty left inside,
    Even the pieces she tries to hide.

    Broken, tattered and torn,
    Heart filled with scorn.
    Agony and pain,
    Riddle her every day.
    Questioning thoughts and
    wondering haze.

    Making her wish it was
    Not the end of days,
    But the very first day,
    The realized as well as she,
    All the ugly trapped inside.
    And they would find her,
    As unloveible as she does.

    So she can be all alone.
    As alone as she can be.
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    I titled it this because of what this poem ment to me. Take from it what you will on your own level.
    Last edited by bratling; Aug 28, 2007 at 06:59 AM. Reason: I added a line....cus I felt like it made it close better and made the point or rather MY point...more clear.

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    Re: Multiple personality.

    This one's a doozy. It's one of your longer ones. I like it though. It's always a treat to see you attempt rhyming with your poetry--since you hardly do it. ^_^ Mad props!


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    Re: Multiple personality.

    agree with atomik there.. mad props good job i can never make any poems better than this 1 @.@

    keep up the good work~!

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    Re: Multiple personality.

    THanks Ray-me. I think when it comes to poetry...it's not a matter of better or worse. AT least not to me. It's just different expressions and different emotions yanno? Everyones got a strong point and a weak one when it comes to this poetry stuff. I'm good at imagery and feeling. But I lack sometimes in grammar, my spelling is horrid and rhyming...is often damn near impossible for me. So I'm extra pleased that ya'll enjoyed this one!

    Thanks Sprout. Thanks Ray-me!

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    Re: Multiple personality.

    good job on the poem
    it as a lot of feeling
    mainly anger all the
    same you did great job
    hope to see more

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    Re: Multiple personality.

    Why thank you again. I promise I'm not ALWAYS angry. Just today. Well just sometimes. Especially when I'm writing. Buuut that's ok. Nice that you like it.

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