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    Re: Must read! needed title

    Quote Originally Posted by starfire1036 View Post
    i write as if they are sentences but moved down a line ill show you

    He stands there, yet he does not move.
    He sings to her.
    With his words he soothes.
    A slight smile written across her face.
    Dreaming for a while.
    In this moment she feels safe.
    He walks toward, toward her.
    Caressing her with every word for, he is the one she is sure.
    His hand upon her cheek.
    The warmth travels.
    Deep in her eyes his begin to seek.
    Smiling as her mind scrambles.
    I love you darling, he says aloud.
    I love you too, my prince charming, said by her so proud.
    For a young poor boy he is, and a pincess before him sits.
    She smiles, as both their hearts shift.
    >.< jeez... people just do not understand me... oh well I ment something like this:

    He stands there, yet he does not move,
    He sings to her,
    With his words he soothes,
    A slight smile written across her face,
    Dreaming for a while,
    In this moment she feels safe,
    He walks toward, toward her,
    Caressing her with every word for, he is the one she is sure,
    His hand upon her cheek,
    The warmth travels,
    Deep in her eyes his begin to seek,
    Smiling as her mind scrambles,
    I love you darling, he says aloud,
    I love you too, my prince charming, said by her so proud,
    For a young poor boy he is, and a pincess before him sits,
    She smiles, as both their hearts shift.
    >.< thats just what I always see them as.... but nvm that.... sry everyone...
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    Re: Must read! needed title

    I like it overall. A few things that could be tweaked but they don't need to be.

    Blissfully in motion My sad attempt at a title
    I got nothing.

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    Re: Must read! needed title

    I have a name, the feelings and powers of love. That is so stupid sounding to me.
    But ignore the stupid part and eventually you or someone else will come up with a
    title.

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    Re: Must read! needed title

    Quote Originally Posted by Haruko Haruhara View Post
    I have a name, the feelings and powers of love. That is so stupid sounding to me.
    But ignore the stupid part and eventually you or someone else will come up with a
    title.
    Agreed, right there with you... well except with the feelings and powers of love. That totally goes with the poem i had already replied to earlier. There are numerous ways that you can name this poem that brings it to life rather then keeping it in a plain piece of paper.

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