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    My Bleeding Heart

    The time stops, I'm the only one that's moving
    Your voice I hear, it's so smoothing
    Life goes on, I have to keep moving along
    I could hear them whisper, "She's too young."
    Looking in the mirrior, seeing tears in my reflection
    This place with memories locked in, is a destruction

    The time starts, I'm the only one behind
    Faking a smile from fights full of sighs
    Memories turning to be so blurry
    My comforting place begins to empty
    They whispered, "She's always been wrong."
    Crying softly, listening to a sad song

    My bleeding heart couldn't take it anymore
    Every part of me is so numb and sore
    My bleeding heart don't want it anymore
    Have I been here before?

    My reflection is so blurry
    My park seems so empty
    My memories is so blurry
    My life feels so empty
    "I love you with all my heart that I can't explain how much in words."

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    Re: My Bleeding Heart

    awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww
    beatiful sad and true.............................................. ........
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    Re: My Bleeding Heart

    Nice way of putting sad feeling into a poem. Keep it up.

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    Re: My Bleeding Heart

    awww....so touching.i wish i could compose something lyk dat.good 1 michelle.

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    Re: My Bleeding Heart

    Nice job putting the emotion into every line and showing how feeling empty really is! I think you did and excellent job on this one!

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    Re: My Bleeding Heart

    Thank you all, I usually write poems/songs based on my feelings. That's how I felt whenever I feel sad, or mad. ^_^
    "I love you with all my heart that I can't explain how much in words."

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    Re: My Bleeding Heart

    This poem you made, For3v3r_Lost is filled with detailed descriptions that makes the reader picture out the image that your poem is trying to tell. The imagery is good. Great poem, keep it up.

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