My Bleeding Heart

For3v3r_Lost · Oct 27, 2006, 01:43 PM

The time stops, I'm the only one that's moving
Your voice I hear, it's so smoothing
Life goes on, I have to keep moving along
I could hear them whisper, "She's too young."
Looking in the mirrior, seeing tears in my reflection
This place with memories locked in, is a destruction

The time starts, I'm the only one behind
Faking a smile from fights full of sighs
Memories turning to be so blurry
My comforting place begins to empty
They whispered, "She's always been wrong."
Crying softly, listening to a sad song

My bleeding heart couldn't take it anymore
Every part of me is so numb and sore
My bleeding heart don't want it anymore
Have I been here before?

My reflection is so blurry
My park seems so empty
My memories is so blurry
My life feels so empty

LostbutFound · Oct 27, 2006, 02:21 PM

awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww
beatiful sad and true.............................................. ........

*ketaro* · Oct 27, 2006, 07:25 PM

Nice way of putting sad feeling into a poem. Keep it up.

JefferyXie · Oct 27, 2006, 11:19 PM

awww....so touching.i wish i could compose something lyk dat.good 1 michelle.

BlueFox1 · Oct 27, 2006, 11:27 PM

Nice job putting the emotion into every line and showing how feeling empty really is! I think you did and excellent job on this one!

For3v3r_Lost · Oct 28, 2006, 09:19 AM

Thank you all, I usually write poems/songs based on my feelings. That's how I felt whenever I feel sad, or mad. ^_^

raja_psyche · Oct 28, 2006, 06:38 PM

This poem you made, For3v3r_Lost is filled with detailed descriptions that makes the reader picture out the image that your poem is trying to tell. The imagery is good. Great poem, keep it up.

Oct 27, 2006, 01:43 PM	#1 (permalink)
For3v3r_Lost Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: My own little world Posts: 249 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 410	My Bleeding Heart The time stops, I'm the only one that's moving Your voice I hear, it's so smoothing Life goes on, I have to keep moving along I could hear them whisper, "She's too young." Looking in the mirrior, seeing tears in my reflection This place with memories locked in, is a destruction The time starts, I'm the only one behind Faking a smile from fights full of sighs Memories turning to be so blurry My comforting place begins to empty They whispered, "She's always been wrong." Crying softly, listening to a sad song My bleeding heart couldn't take it anymore Every part of me is so numb and sore My bleeding heart don't want it anymore Have I been here before? My reflection is so blurry My park seems so empty My memories is so blurry My life feels so empty __________________ .:\|Myspace Profile\|.:.\|My Forum\|.:.\|My AO Gallery\|.:.\|My December\|:. "I love you with all my heart that I can't explain how much in words."
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Oct 27, 2006, 02:21 PM	#2 (permalink)
LostbutFound Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Oct 2006 Location: Behind you ...........boo Posts: 294 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 814	Re: My Bleeding Heart awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww beatiful sad and true.............................................. ........ __________________ Ok in order to judge other you first have to be able to judge yourself, then we must all except each others as equals
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ketaro kitty Join Date: Apr 2005 Posts: 4,221 Thanks: 27 Thanked 31 Times in 29 Posts Credits: 23,200	Re: My Bleeding Heart Nice way of putting sad feeling into a poem. Keep it up.
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JefferyXie Shichibukai Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: Sydney Posts: 613 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 210	Re: My Bleeding Heart awww....so touching.i wish i could compose something lyk dat.good 1 michelle.
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BlueFox1 Upcoming Legend Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: A place called Midnight Sun know as Tranquility Posts: 584 Thanks: 8 Thanked 6 Times in 6 Posts Credits: 1,176	Re: My Bleeding Heart Nice job putting the emotion into every line and showing how feeling empty really is! I think you did and excellent job on this one! __________________
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Oct 28, 2006, 09:19 AM	#6 (permalink)
For3v3r_Lost Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: My own little world Posts: 249 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 410	Re: My Bleeding Heart Thank you all, I usually write poems/songs based on my feelings. That's how I felt whenever I feel sad, or mad. ^_^ __________________ .:\|Myspace Profile\|.:.\|My Forum\|.:.\|My AO Gallery\|.:.\|My December\|:. "I love you with all my heart that I can't explain how much in words."
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raja_psyche Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: In the Pearl of the Orient Posts: 393 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 1,497	Re: My Bleeding Heart This poem you made, For3v3r_Lost is filled with detailed descriptions that makes the reader picture out the image that your poem is trying to tell. The imagery is good. Great poem, keep it up. __________________ Thank you very much,Reese for this wonderful signature ^_^
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