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    My Confession

    I never wanted to change your world
    I only wanted a taste of it
    I never ment for this to happen
    I only wanted to test my strength
    now you sit crumbling
    staring at my bound and broken body
    your heart is shattered
    my blood is splattered
    all across the floor.

    No regrets I once said
    It was until you'd walked through that door
    Painful Memories sting your mind
    Of all the people you'd left behind
    and now as my life fades away
    I remember all the things
    i'd longed to say
    Of all the things
    I'd longed to do
    All now broken dreams
    Never would they come true
    My stupidity broke my body
    My stupidity killed you

    Now I stand here staring at you,
    Alone and lifeless
    Your coffin stains my thoughts
    This is what my stupidity brought
    It's my fault that I didn't die
    Still I stand here
    For the first time I cry
    I don't want to live anymore
    My heart has been broken
    I fall to the floor.

    Back to those thoughts
    Back to that door
    Back to that night
    I wish for once more
    Back to that knife
    Back to that cut
    Back to the blood
    And what my insanity brought.

    <comments: and sorry for the grammer and stanza things but i was to lazy to make it perfect lol>
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    Re: My Confession

    CHHHHHHHHHHHEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAAAA AAAAAAA!!!!
    woa that was odd...well I love you poem...it makes sence...but it is also confusing...i don't think i spelled that rite but anyways...Yup I loved it and i hope you rite more...

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    Re: My Confession

    Whoa man great poem! It realy explains iin detail how you mest up. Realy, this is a great poem. She dies because of your "stupidity". Whoa... I realy enjoied reading this. Keep it up, look forward to your next piece of work!

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    Othello, i'll say this again....u're getting better n better.....i need to post some poem XD

    Anyways like TF said it's good with the sort of story u got going. Keep it up

    Thanks for the siggy Ky-lyrra

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    Re: My Confession

    The rhyming created a good rythm that made it more interesting to read. Nicely done.

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    ok, that's it. im hooked to your poems....which means i'll probaly be ur fan !
    i really love that all your poems rhyme and that whenever u read it out it has a real nice flow to it. very deep poem. one that describes ur love ones being killed out of your stupidity(no offence XD) and u being extremely guilty. i also liked the title. ^^

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    Re: My Confession

    this poem is really great
    i am gonna save this poem and
    print it out later if thats ok with you.
    this poem is worth reading more than once
    i like this alot
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: My Confession

    Impressive really impressive , but don't get used to it because I'am going to make a better poem

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