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    My Crying won't help

    My tears keep falling with nothingness
    You look at me with them thats how I ended up in this

    Crying won't do nothing
    Rage won't do anything
    You of course will cause me more disaster
    I watch everyone leave me with sorrow
    Nothing could stop these tears from falling with borrow
    Gentleness won't help me from calling anyone

    With hatred on my side I'll be the only one
    On the stars on the moon
    No where else but the bottom of earth soon
    Till that time all I can do is cry

    Having nothing will only cause me to lie
    Everyone will stare at me with hate
    Letting me wait since it's too late
    Please no one come to help me or it just cause the same on this state


    Thats all. That was a bit too long well to me. This poem was an acrostics poem just to remind you all. Stay happy to all!
    「When I'm sad, I stop being sad and be awesome instead」

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    Re: My Crying won't help

    That acronym is a cute touch. I really liked your poem. You could improve a little but this was really touching. Made me wanna' give you a big hug.

    Our love will go on until the end of time. I will always be yours and you will be mine.

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    Re: My Crying won't help

    I also liked the acronymn scheme. That's a very creative approach. Keep up the good work! ^_^


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    Re: My Crying won't help

    I thank you both for your support and comments! I thank you very much!
    「When I'm sad, I stop being sad and be awesome instead」

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    Re: My Crying won't help

    Yaaay! Very original! Many kudos and hats off to you!

    Thats very inovative, im anxious to see what you come up with next.
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    Re: My Crying won't help

    hm...nice use of the acronym...but my main focus is that this poem shows a girl crying alone...and doesnt want help, I find this contradicting...I like your poem.

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    Re: My Crying won't help

    I really thank you all for your comments! You guys are so spport of!! Thanks to all!
    「When I'm sad, I stop being sad and be awesome instead」

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