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    My Deepest Thoughts

    I feel so alone
    No where to go
    Why do I have to feel this way
    No matter what I do, there is no stopping this feeling

    I’ve been to many places for help
    Why can’t I find any?
    Am I that incapable of feeling sane?
    How do I manage to drive myself through this?

    Again, I’m feeling sorrow
    That emotion is constantly dragging me down
    It’s too hard to find something good to say
    Am I that hurtful towards myself?

    I never realized that my sadness affected others around me
    Again, it makes me feel that I some how screwed up
    I don’t mean for this to happen
    It only brings me lower than I feel

    No one can stand to be around me any longer
    It should bother me
    I’m tired of being alone
    But I can’t help but to feel better when no one’s around

    What will it take to make me happy?
    Am I destined to make myself miserable?
    These questions I ask myself constantly
    I can’t seem to find the answers

    I’m still confused by the way I feel
    When will this stop?
    Countless times I’ve said I want to start over
    Maybe this time I’ll mean it

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    Re: My Deepest Thoughts

    A poem mostly out of questions? Bad move. It seems repetitive and gets very annoying to some people. I'd suggest trying to write the same poem from a different perspective.
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    Re: My Deepest Thoughts

    I like this poem. It's speaking about a conflict going on in your head. Keep up the good work and I like the name of your poem. Good choice why did you chose it?

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    Re: My Deepest Thoughts

    honestly, my friend helped me title it and im glad you liked it

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    Re: My Deepest Thoughts

    wow girl you went good on this, i give a 20, i thought you only make love poems once?

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