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    My friends

    I saw my friend yesterday
    And he ask me if I am okay
    He ask what my new friend is
    And I answer him with a bliss
    I said; my old friend came from doors
    My new friend comes from walls
    My old friend had scent
    My new friend has a cent
    My old freind loves to sing
    My new friend loves to ring
    My old friend had a phone
    My new friend had a stone
    My old friend love to writes
    My new friend is afraid to fight
    My old friend is nice to say
    My new friend love to pay
    My old friend can't deny
    My new friend I just pass by
    My old friend give me temporary pain
    My new friend give me eternal shame
    Therefore I conclude that all the ways
    Before it all of my days
    That my new friend is cannot compare anymore
    To my old friend before

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    Re: My friends

    It was rather repetitive, almost to the point of being annoying. And yet the story you were trying to tell was fairly good after it was over. I like the whole comparison idea despite that being what made it repetitive.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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