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    My God-sent Saviour

    I've worked alone,
    Scars bearing my past,
    My work soaked in blood,
    Decorated with skeletons,
    Laced with hatred from others,
    I cannot do anything but do my job.

    My life betrayed once,
    My heart has closed down,
    My eyes turned to cold fury,
    Those round me fear the angel of death,
    I am no God-send saviour.

    Then she was there,
    Protected me, stranger,
    One who had just filled the air with death,
    Yet she turned her dark eyes on me,
    With no reason or cause to save.

    She was beautiful in this ravaged world,
    I asked her to come with me,
    Away from this pestilence land,
    She stood strong and wanted to save those round her,
    She was naive but noble.

    Her family were already dead,
    There was nothing more to do,
    Mourning was no use but I allowed her that comfort,
    I pulled her close to me,
    She took my mask away and pressed her lips,
    Against my scars and past.

    She fell in love with me,
    Never hated or fear me,
    I wasnt the angel of death to her,
    I was her guardian angel,
    Protecting her fragile love and life,
    She was my God-sent saviour.

    Saviour from the chaos and madness.

    Enjoy this latest poem. it's about a girl i love very much. she knows who she is. XP

    Thanks for the siggy Ky-lyrra

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    Re: My God-sent Saviour

    Awesome free verse poem! I could picture every thing that you described! Very well written and no mistakes that I could see! Truly awesome poem Blade X! Keep up the good work!

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    Re: My God-sent Saviour

    Wow Jason, you only surprise me more and more each time with your writing skills. This is a very beautiful, engaging poem. The girl that you dedicate your poems to is one very fortunate girl. ^.^ Keep up the good work. <3

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    Re: My God-sent Saviour

    Thanks Jason. This poem is way different from the rest. This is one of my top favorites.. I love it jason! It has a more of a background than your others do.
    Thank you Lasura!
    My lover speaks; and he says, 'Arise my beloved my beautiful one and come!' -Song of Songs 2:10

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    Re: My God-sent Saviour

    Thats a really great poem Blade X. I am not really into poetry and have only recently taken an interest in it, but this is one of my favorites I have read so far.

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    Re: My God-sent Saviour

    A lot of information for the reader to take in; sometimes that can be bad. And sometimes? it could be fairly good. I'm not fond of your wording, but the amount of information is quite good.
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    Re: My God-sent Saviour

    meh, i try to get cer tain types of wording in. doesnt seem to fit in when i replace some. the tone of the word, the meaning of it, i try to fit it in.

    Thanks for the siggy Ky-lyrra

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