As she relaxes,
I notice i'm falling in love,
As she lyes there..wow.
what you guys think? And I know i've gone off one syllable on the second line.
I'm just thinkin of ome more so I will add them in the thread so stay tuned!:)
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As she relaxes,
I notice i'm falling in love,
As she lyes there..wow.
what you guys think? And I know i've gone off one syllable on the second line.
I'm just thinkin of ome more so I will add them in the thread so stay tuned!:)
cute... first word that pops into my head... cute. *shivers* Sort of creepy too, because I got this mental image of my ex-boyfriend staring at me after I woke up from sleeping. :eek1: LOL I like it!
It was cute,but it definately needed more. Good job.
Im a huge fan of haikus... They're a great writing exercise. I liked yours. Creative... It captured just enough of an emotion for me... I think it was perfect.
Simple is sweet. Though there is a minor spelling/grammatical error.
Lyes = lays
Good job.