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    My Haiku

    As she relaxes,
    I notice i'm falling in love,
    As she lyes there..wow.


    what you guys think? And I know i've gone off one syllable on the second line.

    I'm just thinkin of ome more so I will add them in the thread so stay tuned!
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    Re: My Haiku

    cute... first word that pops into my head... cute. *shivers* Sort of creepy too, because I got this mental image of my ex-boyfriend staring at me after I woke up from sleeping. LOL I like it!

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    Re: My Haiku

    It was cute,but it definately needed more. Good job.
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    Re: My Haiku

    Im a huge fan of haikus... They're a great writing exercise. I liked yours. Creative... It captured just enough of an emotion for me... I think it was perfect.
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    Re: My Haiku

    Simple is sweet. Though there is a minor spelling/grammatical error.

    Lyes = lays

    Good job.
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