My Heart is Beating

P.R. Princess · Feb 25, 2007, 12:11 PM

My heart is beating
Faster and faster
Is it in my head?
The love for him?
Or is it real?

My heart is beating like a drum
The loud booms
They fill my ears.

My heart is beating
Thinking of his warmth
The comforting hugs
The passionate kiss

My heart is beating
Longing for his smile
His comforting
Him.

My heart is beating faster and faster
It’s not in my head
But in my heart

My heart is beating
To the love
Between him and me.

Well Thats it I hope you like.(^.^)

*Kasai* · Feb 26, 2007, 02:11 AM

You need to change the font because it clashes with the color of the board.

shippo69 · Feb 26, 2007, 06:12 AM

good poem but u need to dchange the colour of the words

Darkened_Star · Feb 26, 2007, 10:27 AM

It was good... but when I read the line you put...

Quote:

Well Thats it I hope you like.(^.^)

it made me forget about what I had just read. LOL I can understand how you feel in this poem, so I like it even more. ^_^ Keep up the good work. ^_^

Peach_follows · Feb 26, 2007, 06:48 PM

Yep, I know how it is to feel overpowered by your passionately beating heart. To be so caught up in "him", you can't tell if its your head or heart doing all the thinking.... Your poem really captures that feeling. Good work.

*The White Wolf* · Feb 26, 2007, 07:10 PM

Very nice poem, princess! Reminds me of the song "My Heart Beats Like A Drum" by ATC. Keep it up!

JefferyXie · Feb 26, 2007, 09:04 PM

Good structure,very thoughtful and interesting ideas.But i hate the font.No offense.

fredsboo · Mar 02, 2007, 05:59 AM

I loved it reminds me of me with my bf lol........

*Ky-lyrra* · Mar 02, 2007, 06:53 AM

It's a nice poem. Just work on the punctuation. I liked the way you went with this poem and there could have been more added to it. I feel like you wanted more but you stopped because you didn't want to mess it up or you thought you would. All in all I give it a 4/5

lebasiara · Mar 02, 2007, 08:57 AM

I like it... it is a good job. Just the punctuation needs to be worked, that's it. I really like it. It brought me bad memories though... not your fault. Keep doing more works!!!!

*Ky-lyrra* · Mar 02, 2007, 09:10 AM

Lebby please don't use that font it hurts peoples eyes. I can see how it brought bad memories but then you just look past them and look forward till you feel those things again Lebby.

Feb 25, 2007, 12:11 PM	#1 (permalink)
P.R. Princess NalaMidnight Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: Virginia Posts: 898 Thanks: 3 Thanked 17 Times in 16 Posts Credits: 14,091	My Heart is Beating My heart is beating Faster and faster Is it in my head? The love for him? Or is it real? My heart is beating like a drum The loud booms They fill my ears. My heart is beating Thinking of his warmth The comforting hugs The passionate kiss My heart is beating Longing for his smile His comforting Him. My heart is beating faster and faster It’s not in my head But in my heart My heart is beating To the love Between him and me. Well Thats it I hope you like.(^.^) __________________ ~GUNSLINGER~A7X=MIA~ ~ MYSPACE~AWESOME PLACE TO SAVE~ ~I give my heart and everything to my sailor~ Last edited by Kasai; Feb 26, 2007 at 07:01 AM. Reason: The color clashed with the board.
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Kasai Domme Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Florida Posts: 2,745 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 1,380	Re: My Heart is Beating You need to change the font because it clashes with the color of the board. __________________ Seduced by Flesh
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shippo69 Newbie Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: the house down the lane from you Posts: 29 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 160	Re: My Heart is Beating good poem but u need to dchange the colour of the words __________________ I love beautiful carnage.
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Peach_follows Still pointing the sword? Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: Friendly Fridley Posts: 966 Thanks: 28 Thanked 17 Times in 17 Posts Credits: 10,300	Re: My Heart is Beating Yep, I know how it is to feel overpowered by your passionately beating heart. To be so caught up in "him", you can't tell if its your head or heart doing all the thinking.... Your poem really captures that feeling. Good work. __________________ I will give you a son....
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The White Wolf The Real Batgirl. Join Date: Feb 2007 Posts: 2,556 Thanks: 2 Thanked 7 Times in 7 Posts Credits: 9,072	Re: My Heart is Beating Very nice poem, princess! Reminds me of the song "My Heart Beats Like A Drum" by ATC. Keep it up! __________________
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Feb 26, 2007, 09:04 PM	#7 (permalink)
JefferyXie Shichibukai Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: Sydney Posts: 613 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 210	Re: My Heart is Beating Good structure,very thoughtful and interesting ideas.But i hate the font.No offense.
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Mar 02, 2007, 05:59 AM	#8 (permalink)
fredsboo Newbie Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: tx newton lol Posts: 74 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 205	Re: My Heart is Beating I loved it reminds me of me with my bf lol........ __________________ *Im the type of girl who burst out laughing in silents about something that happened yesterday*
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Ky-lyrra Lost In My Own World Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: Fruityville, Florida Posts: 1,531 Thanks: 4 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Credits: 5,019	Re: My Heart is Beating It's a nice poem. Just work on the punctuation. I liked the way you went with this poem and there could have been more added to it. I feel like you wanted more but you stopped because you didn't want to mess it up or you thought you would. All in all I give it a 4/5 __________________ ™Soon To Be Mother™ Thanks For The Tag Aiora!
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lebasiara Live and feel the music Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: Here and there... Posts: 929 Thanks: 10 Thanked 8 Times in 8 Posts Credits: 12,853	Re: My Heart is Beating I like it... it is a good job. Just the punctuation needs to be worked, that's it. I really like it. It brought me bad memories though... not your fault. Keep doing more works!!!! __________________ Awesome sig Yasmine ^_^ I appreciate it thank you very much ^_^ $C:\Documents and Settings\MARA\My Documents\My Pictures\Anime room\sigs\music_sig1 mia ^_^.jpg$ I am back... be afraid... be very afraid ^_^ Last edited by lebasiara; Mar 02, 2007 at 09:12 AM.
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Ky-lyrra Lost In My Own World Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: Fruityville, Florida Posts: 1,531 Thanks: 4 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Credits: 5,019	Re: My Heart is Beating Lebby please don't use that font it hurts peoples eyes. I can see how it brought bad memories but then you just look past them and look forward till you feel those things again Lebby. __________________ ™Soon To Be Mother™ Thanks For The Tag Aiora!
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