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Old Feb 25, 2007, 12:11 PM   #1 (permalink)
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My Heart is Beating

My heart is beating
Faster and faster
Is it in my head?
The love for him?
Or is it real?

My heart is beating like a drum
The loud booms
They fill my ears.

My heart is beating
Thinking of his warmth
The comforting hugs
The passionate kiss

My heart is beating
Longing for his smile
His comforting
Him.

My heart is beating faster and faster
It’s not in my head
But in my heart

My heart is beating
To the love
Between him and me.

Well Thats it I hope you like.(^.^)
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Old Feb 26, 2007, 02:11 AM   #2 (permalink)
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Re: My Heart is Beating

You need to change the font because it clashes with the color of the board.
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Old Feb 26, 2007, 06:12 AM   #3 (permalink)
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Re: My Heart is Beating

good poem but u need to dchange the colour of the words
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Old Feb 26, 2007, 10:27 AM   #4 (permalink)
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Re: My Heart is Beating

It was good... but when I read the line you put...
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Well Thats it I hope you like.(^.^)
it made me forget about what I had just read. LOL I can understand how you feel in this poem, so I like it even more. ^_^ Keep up the good work. ^_^
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Old Feb 26, 2007, 06:48 PM   #5 (permalink)
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Re: My Heart is Beating

Yep, I know how it is to feel overpowered by your passionately beating heart. To be so caught up in "him", you can't tell if its your head or heart doing all the thinking.... Your poem really captures that feeling. Good work.
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Old Feb 26, 2007, 07:10 PM   #6 (permalink)
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Re: My Heart is Beating

Very nice poem, princess! Reminds me of the song "My Heart Beats Like A Drum" by ATC. Keep it up!
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Old Feb 26, 2007, 09:04 PM   #7 (permalink)
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Re: My Heart is Beating

Good structure,very thoughtful and interesting ideas.But i hate the font.No offense.
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Old Mar 02, 2007, 05:59 AM   #8 (permalink)
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I loved it reminds me of me with my bf lol........
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Re: My Heart is Beating

It's a nice poem. Just work on the punctuation. I liked the way you went with this poem and there could have been more added to it. I feel like you wanted more but you stopped because you didn't want to mess it up or you thought you would. All in all I give it a 4/5
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I like it... it is a good job. Just the punctuation needs to be worked, that's it. I really like it. It brought me bad memories though... not your fault. Keep doing more works!!!!
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Lebby please don't use that font it hurts peoples eyes. I can see how it brought bad memories but then you just look past them and look forward till you feel those things again Lebby.
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