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    My last poem for you.

    A rose for her.
    Is a bullet for me.
    The reminder of failure.
    And a torn family.

    I should have known.
    How things would occur.
    Bet you'd be an awsome father.
    If you had kids with her.

    You didn't, not yet.
    But I bet thats your dream.
    Now I know for certain.
    Things are never what they seem.

    While you dream of what could be.
    I take care of what is.
    A thousand thoughts pass through your mind.
    How many are his?

    Your very own fleash.
    Who'm you struggle to see.
    Perhaps its because.
    Hes still part of me.

    I wish I could change this.
    If he could have you near.
    For him to be happy.
    I would dissapear.


    I'll leave you alone.
    I'll work on fading.
    I have gotten the hint.
    It feels so degrading.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: My last poem for you.

    Hmm... a nice poem, made me really sad... seemed even depressing to mee... I think I shouldn't read poems that talk about someones reall life...

    The starting is just great!!!!
    A rose for her.
    Is a bullet for me.
    Straight and clear, just like lightning from the blue sky... great!

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: My last poem for you.

    That's messed up, Peach.

    Your poems continue to touch me. Great work. Sad circumstances.

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    Re: My last poem for you.

    This seems like a sad poem well to me. But it's still great cause it just reminds me a bit but I still loved so I hope to see more of your great work!
    「When I'm sad, I stop being sad and be awesome instead」

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    Re: My last poem for you.

    This is really fantastically written. You get better and better at this every time you write I swear. It makes me really sad though. made me wanna cry a little. -.-

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    Re: My last poem for you.

    Quote Originally Posted by Lasura View Post
    Hmm... a nice poem, made me really sad... seemed even depressing to mee... I think I shouldn't read poems that talk about someones reall life...

    The starting is just great!!!!

    Straight and clear, just like lightning from the blue sky... great!
    Ya'know... I also find it difficult to write about "real life"... But its also hard to just keep it inside... and even harder still to wake up everyday and have to accept that this IS my life.

    I dunno.

    Sometimes I just wish I could write the perfect poem to make it all better.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: My last poem for you.

    Quote Originally Posted by Peach_follows View Post
    Ya'know... I also find it difficult to write about "real life"... But its also hard to just keep it inside... and even harder still to wake up everyday and have to accept that this IS my life.

    I dunno.

    Sometimes I just wish I could write the perfect poem to make it all better.
    But... you know... poems that writer writes about their own life are usualy much more touching and interesting and... real...
    I just said that because I get really worried even though I haven't really even taked to you...

    I have the same problem... when I write poems I ussualy write about the feelings I truly have inside me and about things that have really happened to me, and a thing even worse is that I'm really open and could tell my whole life story to a stranger,so I really should think twice before I post a poem...

    Yea... a perfect poems... actually each poem helps a lill, doesn't it... you tell how you feel and feel better afterwards... well... I ussualy do...

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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