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    Question My last sin

    as God searches for the list of children
    it said i had no love towards my same being
    i just chose this road for escaping the reality
    meaning and truth of life
    a strong wind blows taking me out of
    the heavens
    taking all my saint from
    the heavens
    my seal from
    the heavens
    broked into millions of pieces
    my wings bured to ashes
    as i felled to the green earth
    i questioned my self if this is
    how is going to end
    as i closed my eyes
    i kept falling no one was there
    the heavens
    to save me.. i was alone will falling from
    the heavens
    the sign from
    the heavens
    '' evrybody needs somebody to love''
    i open my eyes will facing down to the earth
    the wind that blowed me away took me through the clouds
    and it flew me through the eternal deep blue seas
    i could feel the same releif
    with out the wings or purificacion from
    the heavens
    Then the voice says
    '' a second chance is a second life''
    Last edited by Baal; Oct 04, 2006 at 04:39 PM.



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    I found that kinda hard to read, maybe you could make it into paragraphs?

    I liked the actual poem though, especially the last line..

    TY Sasurai for the lovely sig!*

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    Quote Originally Posted by Hold.Me.X.Thrill.Me View Post
    I found that kinda hard to read, maybe you could make it into paragraphs?

    I liked the actual poem though, especially the last line..
    thanks a lot ill make it paragraph style then



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    Overall it was kind of hard to read but you message came out clear. An Angel falling from heaven, but then being given a second chance to correct the mistake. Good Job!

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    It was a nice poem overall, but it needs to be broken down into paragraphs so it can be more easier to read and get the message of the poem itself.

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