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Reply With QuoteOh wow this has a lot of negitive feelings.. I makes one want to hold another and tell them it will get better. Nice structure though.
at the age of ten,
my life took a spin,
full of mistakes,
friends and fakes,
full of hate.
full of sorrow,
dreading life,
hoping for tommorow,
my families real home,
is in the county jail,
they never learn their lesson,
because they always make bail,
a class thats annoying,
and very unkind,
i defy the laws of nature,
that makes us bind,
the showing of respect,
seamed to be my downfall,
i cant stand anyone,
i hate them all,
my lifes a tornado,
i hurt everything around me,
it seems that true love,
is something ill never see,
i live in the shadows,
not in your visions,
im using my mind,
to put realty in submissions.
Oh wow this has a lot of negitive feelings.. I makes one want to hold another and tell them it will get better. Nice structure though.
Thank you Lasura!My lover speaks; and he says, 'Arise my beloved my beautiful one and come!' -Song of Songs 2:10
thank you for the comment i am glad someone finally commented noone seams to ever want to comment on my work so im very appreciative of the comment
no but just keep it up and write more it takes a while for people to notice you.. trust me!
Thank you Lasura!My lover speaks; and he says, 'Arise my beloved my beautiful one and come!' -Song of Songs 2:10
yeah well ive written over 30 poems and put them on here and i get an average of 5 replies each so....
This has got to be my favorite poem of yours that I've read thus far. Not that otheres werent good... but this one takes the cake.
... Not Ever Again...
well thank you very much but my personal favorite is ...he cries
Wow! I like this alot! You did a very good job of expressing your feelings and emotions within short stanzas. On a scale of 1 to 10, I give it a HELL YEAH!! ^_^
Keep up the good work, and I hope to see more of your poetry. It's good! ^_^
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