my lonely life

Forgotten soul · Mar 26, 2007, 03:46 PM

Journey begins and I stumble,
Path I take is full of yesterdays
Hearing voices from the past I stop,
Staring into a darkened forest
Catching glimpses of old memories
As they fade in and out of my vision.

Old nightmares haunt me,
New ones taunt me.
I trip and fall clutching at wild roses
Leaving me bloodied and beaten,
Crying in frustration and anger.

I strike out at ghost,
They laugh as they fade.
Pointing at the rose I'm caressing
Silently I pull the darkness over me.

Shu · Mar 26, 2007, 04:13 PM

dark. sad. lonely.

all describe this poem.

P.R. Princess · Mar 26, 2007, 04:39 PM

This is a very good poem. Alot of emotion to it.
Of course without that there would be no poetry. but any way I like the poem it may be depressing but it shows how you feel.
Keep up the good work.(^.^)

!The White Wolf · Mar 26, 2007, 04:39 PM

Nice poem, Forgotten. Great job. I enjoyed it's depressed feel. It was really good. Nice work.

Forgotten soul · Mar 26, 2007, 06:58 PM

Thank you
I made this poem when I was listening to the
Song:Whispers in the Dark
Artist:Skillet
I love their songs^_^

JefferyXie · Mar 26, 2007, 10:26 PM

I like the theme of darkness,sadness and loniness.I guess..it is what i am use to reading.

elie26 · Mar 27, 2007, 04:37 AM

Oo really nice. Nice job there ^^ The emotions of the feelings is conveyed very nicely

Hope to read more of your work.

Mar 26, 2007, 03:46 PM	#1 (permalink)
Forgotten soul Newbie Join Date: Mar 2007 Posts: 67 Thanks: 1 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 133	my lonely life Journey begins and I stumble, Path I take is full of yesterdays Hearing voices from the past I stop, Staring into a darkened forest Catching glimpses of old memories As they fade in and out of my vision. Old nightmares haunt me, New ones taunt me. I trip and fall clutching at wild roses Leaving me bloodied and beaten, Crying in frustration and anger. I strike out at ghost, They laugh as they fade. Pointing at the rose I'm caressing Silently I pull the darkness over me. __________________
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Mar 26, 2007, 04:13 PM	#2 (permalink)
Shu Upcoming Legend Join Date: Mar 2006 Posts: 563 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Credits: 749	Re: my lonely life dark. sad. lonely. all describe this poem.
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Mar 26, 2007, 04:39 PM	#3 (permalink)
P.R. Princess NalaMidnight Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: Virginia Posts: 900 Thanks: 3 Thanked 17 Times in 16 Posts Credits: 14,160	Re: my lonely life This is a very good poem. Alot of emotion to it. Of course without that there would be no poetry. but any way I like the poem it may be depressing but it shows how you feel. Keep up the good work.(^.^) __________________ ~GUNSLINGER~A7X=MIA~ ~ MYSPACE~AWESOME PLACE TO SAVE~ ~I give my heart and everything to my sailor~
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Mar 26, 2007, 04:39 PM	#4 (permalink)
!The White Wolf Why so serious? Join Date: Feb 2007 Posts: 2,580 Thanks: 9 Thanked 12 Times in 11 Posts Credits: 10,073	Re: my lonely life Nice poem, Forgotten. Great job. I enjoyed it's depressed feel. It was really good. Nice work.
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Forgotten soul Newbie Join Date: Mar 2007 Posts: 67 Thanks: 1 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 133	Re: my lonely life Thank you I made this poem when I was listening to the Song:Whispers in the Dark Artist:Skillet I love their songs^_^ __________________
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JefferyXie Shichibukai Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: Sydney Posts: 613 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 210	Re: my lonely life I like the theme of darkness,sadness and loniness.I guess..it is what i am use to reading.
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elie26 Elie Jelly Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: Hell is an understatement Posts: 608 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Credits: 2,051	Re: my lonely life Oo really nice. Nice job there ^^ The emotions of the feelings is conveyed very nicely Hope to read more of your work.
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