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    my lonely life

    Journey begins and I stumble,
    Path I take is full of yesterdays
    Hearing voices from the past I stop,
    Staring into a darkened forest
    Catching glimpses of old memories
    As they fade in and out of my vision.

    Old nightmares haunt me,
    New ones taunt me.
    I trip and fall clutching at wild roses
    Leaving me bloodied and beaten,
    Crying in frustration and anger.

    I strike out at ghost,
    They laugh as they fade.
    Pointing at the rose I'm caressing
    Silently I pull the darkness over me.

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    Re: my lonely life

    dark. sad. lonely.

    all describe this poem.

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    Re: my lonely life

    This is a very good poem. Alot of emotion to it.
    Of course without that there would be no poetry. but any way I like the poem it may be depressing but it shows how you feel.
    Keep up the good work.(^.^)

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    Re: my lonely life

    Nice poem, Forgotten. Great job. I enjoyed it's depressed feel. It was really good. Nice work.

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    Re: my lonely life

    Thank you
    I made this poem when I was listening to the
    Song:Whispers in the Dark
    Artist:Skillet
    I love their songs^_^

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    Re: my lonely life

    I like the theme of darkness,sadness and loniness.I guess..it is what i am use to reading.

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    Oo really nice. Nice job there ^^ The emotions of the feelings is conveyed very nicely Hope to read more of your work.

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