I've noticed your poems have this pattern to them. A lot of your sentences start with the same three words. Now, I'm not saying that this was a bad poem. In fact, I like it!Nice! ^_^ It reminds me of talkin' to my little brother. "I'm a grown a** man! You don't tell me, I tell YOU!" LOL.In my mind I am the law
But back to my point. Take this not as criticism, but a friendly challenge. It'll be a fun learning experience. ^_^ Try to break away from the repetitiveness and try to keep a flow with your work. You can use the same concepts/themes you've been using if you want. But try to show us that your vocabulary isn't limited. Because I know you and I know your vocabulary.
Kudos and happy writing! ~S