Thread: My Nightmare

Sometimes I feel weak
I have to be strong
Where is the answer I seek?
Something has gone wrong
I could feel it within me
Is it within you too?
There's something within me
Can you feel it too?

There are two emotions that I recognize in this stanza. I'd suggest only having one and elaborating on that feeling. Then making a transitional verse and moving on to the next. Your stanzas could be longer or shorter, but they need to be something other than what you have. Actually, they dont need to be. It'd just be more appealing.

The emotion in this poem is well written, just in one stanza it gets confusing because there are two emotions that are being portrayed! Overall great poem and keep up the good work!



BlueFox1

hm...
i also dislike to be weak.

by the way... i hope you are not really depressed as the "soul" in this poetry, your poetry.

The poem actually explains how I feel weak but I can't let that happen so I had to be strong. That's how I felt before with all the fights and stress I've had and a relationship that I didn't see something coming but it was too late to go back and change it since it was long ago. Now I've looked back and saw how much I've changed and decided to write a poem about it. Sorry if it's confusing.

i love it, there is a great sense of feeling and it gives you a great visual effect you can almost see and feel the stuggle inside. wondering if the real person will win or the nightmare......

anyway I think it is great

Good poem i can tell ur really into poems. Oh and by the way have you considered joining the poems/fanfics clan.

I havent heard of it...lol Well I would love to join. Yeah I really love poems and songs. Mostly I wrote songs more than poems.