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    Post My own creation

    The darkness dwells deep inside
    within myself i cant confide
    the trust is gone replaced by hate
    cant control my life or fate

    see the wrongs of earth provide
    a reason, method of suicide
    they say have faith in them it will be sunny
    they want only power, sex, and money

    i cant control my beating heart
    the sky turns red, its about to start
    thunder rumbles, screams and cries
    this is the day humanity dies.

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    Re: My own creation

    thats a pretty poem your good

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    Re: My own creation

    Well, the first verse of stanza one capture m interest. Then? I found out that it was a rhyming poem... I'm not really a fan of rhyming poems. I do believe that a person can make poetry without the need to rhyme. And you? You did an okay job. It would be an even better poem with some vivd words thrown in for description and elaboration.
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    Re: My own creation

    i like it SLATERSAN it was pretty good

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