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    My reason for life


    Take my hand, hold me close


    Tell me your dreams and your fantasies...


    Is there any I can help make real for you?


    Even if they seem silly or outrages you can ask me...


    I will never look wrongly upon you...





    My love


    My life


    My reason...



    You are my reason




    I live to serve...


    My master...my lover...my friend




    You won’t take advantage of this chapter in my life...





    Use the time we have wisely...


    No one knows what’s around the river bend...


    We could be happy or miserable....




    Are you willing to find out??


    Because I know I am...

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    Re: My reason for life

    very nice... I can't say that I relate... So I had to envision two strangers in love. Although at first, it felt like you were talking to me. (which is strange, because im not a lesbian lol.)
    Still I thought it was very erotic, but tasteful. Good job!
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    Re: My reason for life

    It was pretty good but some parts where like {okay} but keep writiing.

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    Re: My reason for life

    Well I must say equinn that the poem flows nicely, and as peach says it is erotic yet tastful. I envy the twist that you put on this poem, simply because when the poem starts out you put you reader in the position of you significant other, and then it switches back to you telling how things should happen or are they willing to take a risk and see what the future may hold. Simple yet amazing in my opinion just because of the perspectives. You are well on you way equinn!

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    Re: My reason for life

    Nice... I really like the way you write poems, I have never see nsuch structure anywhere else- 1 line poems. And they are great! I really like them a lot ^^ And this one is also very nice, quite perfect... I could also really see mself in it... Because I also feel like making all dreams of my bf come true...

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: My reason for life

    aww really pretty, and lots of emotions. Its heart felt, and good keep it up.

    I favor these lines
    Take my hand, hold me close


    Tell me your dreams and your fantasies...


    Is there any I can help make real for you?
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