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    My Reflection

    My Reflection

    You were my mirror
    The other me,
    My Reflection
    Always standing in front of me,

    You knew my pain
    The feeling of saying bye,
    How I questioned life
    Yet never stopped to know what was behind my eyes,

    You were my reflection
    Yet why did we live such different lives,
    When all I wanted was your smile
    To lift me from my dive,

    You who were no different from me enjoyed your life
    When I just sat there in the corner and cried,
    I trapped my self in a cage as you flew in wide open space.
    While a large part of me died,

    I was your mirror
    Your reflection,
    The other you
    Yet I trapped myself on earth
    As you slowly took flight.

    If you try and fly to your goal you will only fall from the starry sky

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    Re: My Reflection

    Wording and spelling need a bit of work. Creativeness is the key.
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    Re: My Reflection

    Quote Originally Posted by Kasai View Post
    Wording and spelling need a bit of work. Creativeness is the key.
    Well it is true, but then again the effort put into it, counts too. Nice poem i really liked it.

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    Re: My Reflection

    I see that you corrected the problems that Kasai pointed out, and with that the poems title caught my attention! So to agree with ketaro the effort you put into this poem makes it worth reading! Nicely done!

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    Re: My Reflection

    omg thats sooo good i wish i could wright like you great job ^__^

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