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    my second poem (Don't be to hard on it ^^;;;)

    ~Rage~
    You seek other lost souls
    Ones that will feed your anger
    Blood on your hands feels warm
    Red stirs your heart's rage
    Lifting you head you sing
    To the sepulchral moon
    Hiding behind dark clouds
    You slip silently into shadows
    Unseen but felt
    Like a half-remembered nightmare
    That causes chills to run
    Up and down my spine.

    I see you everyday on the street
    On the bus, in the store
    In my dreams
    I see your rage,
    I feel your rage,
    Your rage batters my body,
    Your rage batters my mind,
    Your rage kills my spirit
    It dies every night
    Beneath you.

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    Re: my second poem(Don't be to hard on it ^^;;;)

    What is the poem based on? ^_^ It's a nice poem with a rhythm to it.

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    Re: my second poem(Don't be to hard on it ^^;;;)

    I agree with rave grip. It's nice poem,but I'm having a hard time with what it's based on.
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    Re: my second poem(Don't be to hard on it ^^;;;)

    This poem is base on
    Song: Open Wounds
    Artist: Skillet
    I was listening to their song and I just had to write this poem

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    Re: my second poem(Don't be to hard on it ^^;;;)

    another poem based on a song.. sheesh how did u guys made 1 out of a song? :/

    well nice poem there ^^ but i never heard this song b4... hmm...

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    Re: my second poem(Don't be to hard on it ^^;;;)

    @RayMe,
    how we make a poem out of a song?
    it's simple you just listen to the beat and don't listen to the singer.
    Just think about the beat and what it means that's how I do it

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    Re: my second poem(Don't be to hard on it ^^;;;)

    I think.. Instead of trying to be more dramatic with the use of short sentences, you need to be more dramatic with the use of words in the sentences instead.
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