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    My Shadow

    I feel the pain tearing
    Continuously shredding my heart
    Into itty-bitty pieces by a flame engulfed hand
    The hand of the demon before me
    Square-shouldered with his long twin blade katana
    Held out in front, dripping my blood from its long slender blade.
    He is my twin, my shadow
    Mimicking every move I do flawlessly
    It knows my very thoughts, my fears, my desires and love.
    The demon smiled its very own black-tooth grin
    Acid dripping from his lower lip as it begins to laugh.
    He knows it could destroy me, for he made me
    The demon is my maker, though not my destroyer
    Even if this body dies, burns eternally, or shatters
    My soul remains alive and free for whatever purpose I desire.
    The demon moves forward, intending a fatal blow
    Yet I drop my guard and allow the strike to pass
    To pass my skin, my blood, my skeleton, though not my soul.
    With my last breathe, blood spattering everywhere
    I speak….”I love you…”

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    Re: My Shadow

    This is a beautiful poem. I love the imagery and elaboration. And I normally gripe about stanzas. This poem is in no need for stanzas. Well done.
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    Re: My Shadow

    my favorite line: My soul remains alive and free for whatever purpose I desire.
    it is truly awesome. Good poem =)

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    Re: My Shadow

    Such a beautiful poem. ^-^ I can learn A LOT from you in writing. I love all of the lines and the poem was very clear. Please post some more if you have the time. ^^

    Good job Zyta san

    ! Rescue me from this loneliness !

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    Re: My Shadow

    Nice poem there, i like the italized format that you used to make the poem interesting to the readers eye.

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    Re: My Shadow

    i love the irony of the poem something full of hate that made you what you showing all that frustrationg and everything your only words are the only words you say are the most pwerfull and dramtic. very awesome
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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