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    My Shadow....The Other Me...

    My Shadow....The Other Me...


    You hide yourself in the shadows, I come when you call
    I try to stop myslef, But I go when you call my name
    They say the shadows are dangerous, But I feel safe within them
    There in your arms I wish to be, But I wake up every morning and find out it was just a dream...

    "Just a silly dream"

    I wonder around during the day, Waiting for the shadows to fall
    For there I can be held by you, Even if it's not reality
    For in my dreams in the shadows, I can be who I want to be
    I can be your friend or lover, Just as long as you held me...

    "Just hold me till morning"

    As we waltz at night, I can't help but want to sleep during the day
    Then we could dance throughout time, Just me and you my shadow
    You live in the shadows, And I in the light
    We can only meet in the moonlight, And have our twilight waltz...

    "Just me and you waltzing in the moonlight"

    A sinful passion burns for you, My tears turn to ash when they fall
    A broken place, I feel not safe
    Reality is like hell, The shadows and you are my hayven
    Scared and alone, Hollow within without you...

    "Empty on the inside"

    My shadow, You are the only one who understands
    My knight, You who protects me
    My friend, You have alwayed helped me
    My lover, I wish it to be...

    "You are the other side of me"

    My heart beats for you at night, But begins to die in the light
    Standing on a thin line, You and the light pull at each end
    I'm being torn apart, I wish to be with you
    But the light wont have that, It wants me to it's self...

    "Don't let the light take me"

    You hide yourself in the shadows, I come when you call for me
    I try to stop myslef, But I go when you call my name the way you do
    They say the shadows are dangerous, But I feel safe within them..with you
    There in your arms I wish to be, But I wake up every morning and find out it was just a dream..and I cry...

    "Just a silly dream, I sob"

    I wonder around during the day, Waiting for the shadows to fall and cover the sun
    For there I can be held by you, Even if it's not reality and just a dream
    For in my dreams in the shadows, I can be who I want to be..I can be who you want
    I can be your friend or lover, Just as long as you held me tightly...

    "Just hold me till morning...when the shadows fade"

    My shadow, You are the only one who understands me anymore
    My knight, You who protects me from the light
    My friend, You have alwayed helped me in my time of need
    My lover, I wish it to be...but it's just a dream...


    "You are the other side of me...I the Ugly and you the Beautiful...I the Sin and you the Pure...I the Tear and you the Smile...I am the Darkness of Reality and you are my Light in the Shadows..."

    "My Shadow....The Other Me..."


    Here's another new 1 of mine.Been workin on it since yesterday lol.Well guys tell me what ya'll think of this 1 as well kk. Always love hearin from ya'll.
    Made by- Ryomakurosaki (Thank you sooooo much!!) ^__^

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    Re: My Shadow....The Other Me...

    I loved it! I don't think you could ever write a bad song. Great job sis. Bravo!
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    Re: My Shadow....The Other Me...

    Oh.. it was beautiful.. Your very talented. It's the first of your work i've read but i'll be looking out for others. ^^ keep up the good work.
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    Re: My Shadow....The Other Me...

    Oh WoW! That was just wonderful... It's truly a great poem. I like it a lot. And I can see myself in there... I really like your style and in this one I especially like how you wrote the 5th stranza and how the last one is kinda repeated, but it's explained more in that one... It is a great ending. And that is also something I would do..

    Well this poem is quite perfect. The flow is nice, the wording is nice, what you saying is just wonderful. Maybe it was a bit too long though, I didn't like a few of the last stranzes because it really made my head spin a little, because I was reading things for the second time and.. they were strong in the first time already and when they appeared again... it was odd

    Well I know I'll see more of your work as one is just beside this one Nice work!!!! ^^

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